真正的天堂

一只鸟在飞，它的母亲在某个目的地等待它的到达。它只知道母亲在远方等它，不知原因。它风雨兼程，急迫迅速。它需要到达。当它找到它的母亲，它向它母

A bird is flying. Its mother is waiting for its arrival at a certain destination. He only knew that his mother was waiting for him in the distance. It's both stormy and urgent. It needs to arrive. When it finds its mother, it turns to its mother

亲炫耀：“三天我飞了几百里，找遍了整个山林，我饥饿，我渴，我的羽毛掉了一大半。我觉得我很坚强。”

Pro show off: "three days I flew hundreds of miles, looking for the whole mountain forest, I was hungry, I was thirsty, my feathers fell more than half.". I feel strong. "

它母亲摇摇头：“你坚强，我承认。你找到了我，你这三天找遍了整个山林，你知道这个山林有几条河流几个湖泊吗？”它摇头，满脸困惑。“孩子，太快的速度会让你错过许多美丽的风景。”

Its mother shook her head: "you are strong, I admit. You have found me. You have searched the whole mountain forest in these three days. Do you know how many rivers and lakes there are in this mountain forest? " He shook his head, his face puzzled. "Kids, too fast will make you miss many beautiful scenery."

速度，在现在的世界已被诠释得很完美了。人们走得不耐烦了，千百年历史的路沉寂在脚下，黄尘四起的时候，人们选择了另一种方式：奔跑。抛弃老年破车，创造更年的工具，但人们似乎忘了牛的存在，因而忽略草原，一寸寸黄沙的侵蚀是一行行血泪的悔恨。人类想跑过大自然，跨越生命本源，寻找人造的天堂。美丽与错误共存的幻想，是否正在破裂？

Speed, in today's world has been interpreted perfectly. People are impatient. Thousands of years of history are still at their feet. When the yellow dust is everywhere, people choose another way: running. People seem to forget the existence of cattle, so they ignore the grassland. The erosion of one inch of yellow sand is a line of blood and tears of regret. Human beings want to run through the nature, cross the origin of life, and look for man-made paradise. Is the illusion of beauty and error breaking up?

人们在同样的时间里奔跑，错过了桃花送走雪花春风唤醒田蛙的春，错过了浪花裂开心花荷盖展开青霞的夏，错过了稻禾沾满金露树木寄走一封封枯叶的秋，错过了山坡覆白雪水面凝银冰的冬。人们应该在这样的季节这样的景色中踱步，让一个个脚印有翡翠的韵脚金银的注释。这才是我们的世界。

People are running in the same time, missing the spring when peach flowers send off snowflakes and spring wind wakes frogs, the summer when waves split and lotus cover unfolds blue clouds, the autumn when rice and grass are covered with golden dew trees send off dead leaves, and the winter when the hillside is covered with white snow and Silver ice. People should pace in such a season and such a scenery, so that one's footprints are annotated with gold and silver of jadeite rhyme. This is our world.

登山不只为了高度。我们的高度应有风度。登临送目的时候，才不会有高处不胜寒的感觉。拾级而上，俯仰春秋，一步之距是美的距离，每接近一步，都有真正的快乐。可当你看见别人已到山顶或后来居上时，你会想到速度；当你看到东方大白，红日即将喷薄时，你会想到速度。用跑的间级代替走的拾级，你认为你理智聪明，你同时应该注意些什么？坡陡级密，谨防摔倒。

Climbing is not just about height. Our height should be gracious. When boarding the destination, you won't feel too cold. Step up and look forward to the spring and Autumn period. The distance between steps is the distance of beauty. Every step closer, there is real happiness. But when you see that others have reached the top of the mountain or come from behind, you will think of speed; when you see the East is white and the red sun is about to blow out, you will think of speed. What do you think you should pay attention to at the same time? The slope is steep and dense. Be careful not to fall.

人们带着满腔热血满囊希望，往往在此受伤，成为路途上征战的折点。得不偿失的结果在历史的大树上累累垂垂。用子弹的速度超越狐的速度，挣扎的凄惨浓缩着危险与生存的病素。而人们在另一棵大树上的丰硕成果，使我们感受到奔跑的美妙。天与地的距离，由可望变成可及，由奇迹变成旧迹。足迹印上明月，目光定格水火，像一首首优美的诗词，字句如星光闪烁。这种风度，足以让人们在这个高度翩翩起舞，击节庆祝。

People with a lot of blood full of hope, often injured here, become a turning point on the road. The results that are not worth the loss are all over the history tree. The speed of bullets surpasses that of foxes, and the misery of struggle concentrates the elements of danger and survival. And people's fruitful results on another big tree make us feel the beauty of running. The distance between heaven and earth, from hope to reach, from miracle to legacy. The footprints are printed with the bright moon, and the eyes are fixed with fire and water, like a beautiful poem, and the words flash like stars. This kind of demeanor is enough for people to dance and celebrate at this height.

每个人都有自己理想的生命环境。地球是所有人的家，地球要成为所有人的理想世界，需要人的创造，更需要人的节奏。一路风景，走走停停，才叫生命的历程。

Everyone has their own ideal living environment. The earth is the home of all people. If the earth wants to become an ideal world for all people, it needs people's creation and rhythm. All the way scenery, stop and go, is the course of life.

生活的天堂才是真正的天堂。美丽在阶前小河中流淌，真实在国中土地上成长。智慧在屋顶青瓦上乘凉，一只鸟与鸟群在大地之上飞翔。

The heaven of life is the real heaven. Beauty flows in the river before the terrace, and grows in the land of middle school. Wisdom enjoys the cool on the green tiles on the roof. A bird and a flock of birds fly on the earth.

我们的风景，我们匆忙或从容的眼睛。

Our landscape, our hasty or leisurely eyes.

点评(中南大学附属实验中学副校长、语文高级教师陈军)：本文的作者在作文立意上有不俗的思想，写出了个性。文章没有直接针对“跑的体验”叙事抒情，而是把握“速度”与“高度”等要素展开联想与想象，有出乎意料之外，在乎情理之中的效果。本文作者的语言很有表现力，整散句的恰当运用为语言项增色不少。总而言之，本文构思的大气，语言的准确、流畅是本文脱颖而出的根本原因。

Comments (Chen Jun, vice president and senior Chinese teacher of Experimental Middle School Affiliated to Central South University): the author of this paper has a good idea of composition conception and has written out his personality. The article does not directly narrate and express feelings for "the experience of running", but holds the elements of "speed" and "height" to carry out association and imagination, which has unexpected results and cares about the effect in reason. The author's language is very expressive, and the proper use of the whole sentence adds a lot of color to the language items. All in all, the atmosphere of this paper and the accuracy and fluency of language are the basic reasons why this paper stands out.