2017高三英语二轮复习（江苏专用）主题36“记”：教育成功

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　　教育成功★★★★★ 话 题 导 语

　　教育是个永恒的话题，成功是每个人的期盼，近年“虎妈”“狼爸”等一再引起人们热议，教育成功是个不容忽视的热点。

　　话 题 必 备 必备词汇： bear heavy load/burden负担很重 conquer hardships

　　战胜困难 further education

　　深造 go abroad

　　出国 achieve success

　　取得成功 receive education

　　接受教育 long for

　　希望；期盼

　　必备句型： The more you've learned，the better prepared/equipped for the future you'll be. 你学得越多，为未来的准备就越充分。 What everyone longs for is success. 所有人都期盼成功。 Only by/through hard work can one achieve success. 只有努力，才能成功。 No pains，no gains. 不劳无获。 If you put your heart into it，nothing can be difficult. 世上无难事，只要肯登攀。

　　佳 作 赏 析 (2017·湖北卷)请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。 You cannot choose what you are given, but you can choose how you make use of it. 注意：1.无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语； 2．除诗歌外，文体不限； 3．文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称； 4．词数为120左右。______________________________________________________________________________________________________ 【满分佳作】

　　Three years ago I failed an important exam in my life and became a student in an ordinary school. Disappointed as I felt at the shabby campus and the poorly­equipped classroom, I found the teachers patient and considerate. Besides, I enjoyed the friendly atmosphere in class. I decided to make the best of it. I worked hard and got along well with my teachers and classmates. Whenever I had difficulties, they were always available. Soon, I became one of the top students in my class, which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.

　　My experience tells me that it is not what you are given but how you make use of it that determines who you are.

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　　根据提示You cannot choose what you are given，but you can choose how you make use of it.(你不能选择别人给你的，但是你可以选择如何利用别人给你的。)及题目要求，结合事例可知，本文可写成记叙文，记叙对你有极大影响的事，以及你的感想。文章可以写成两段或三段，采用第一人称，记叙事情时用过去时态，发表感想用现在时态。

　　本文使用了大量的高级句式，如：Disappointed as I felt at...(as引导的让步状语从句)，I found the teachers patient and considerate.(find的复合结构)，Whenever I had difficulties...(Whenever引导的让步状语从句)，...which greatly increased my confidence and got me motivated.(非限制性定语从句)，...it is not what you are given but how you make use of it that determines who you are.(强调句，而且使用了not...but句式)，使得文章非常精彩。而高级词汇、短语的使用，如make the best of，available，motivated，determines等等，更是锦上添花。确实是一篇上乘之作。