2017届高考英语书面表达练讲指导评析（第二部分）专题四：开放式专题练评2

　　2017届高考英语书面表达专题指导、练讲及习作评析（第二部分专题练评）（专题四 开放式2）

　　请根据下面提示，写一篇短文。词数50左右。In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

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　　该题选自2017届北京海定区第一次模拟考试的开放式作文，但是，我们对作为江苏的考生的要求是作文词数要达到150左右。

　　该题借助一幅漫画，让学生表达自己对画面中内容的理解。在观察、理解试题的前提下，从不同角度，展开想象，表达自己的观点。图

　　2.他很努力地找，但却一无所获；

　　3.他没有先观察自己的身边，否则他就能轻松的发现鱼群了。

　　在描述漫画内容时，考生要注意用自己对画面内容进行简明、清楚地叙述。

　　①A man on a boat is searching for some fish with a telescope

　　②A fisherman on a boat is seeking fish with a telescope.

　　③A man on a boat is trying to search for fish with great effort through a telephone.

　　④The major character on a boat, using a telescope, is struggling to search for some fish.

　　⑤A man on a boat , using a telescope, wants to find with great effort if there are some fish distantly.

　　2.他很努力，但却一无所获。

　　①Hard as he attempts, he has gained nothing.

　　②Hard as he tries, his efforts do not pay off.

　　③Although he attempts hard, his efforts are all in vain/useless.

　　④Although he works very hard, he has got nothing.

　　⑤However hard he works, he fails to find any fish.

　　3.他没有先观察自己的身边，否则他就能轻松的发现鱼群了。

　　①He doesn’t first observe the circumstance around him otherwise he is able to find a school of fish swimming nearby.

　　②A school of fish is swimming just nearby, but he completely ignores/neglects them.

　　③He doesn’t find a school fish swimming nearby because he doesn’t first observe the circumstance around him.

　　④If he first observed the circumstance around him, the fish swimming nearby should be discovered easily.

　　⑤A school of fish is swimming just nearby, but he completely turns a blind eye to them.

　　连句成篇（注意加过渡词语和过渡句）

　　①As is vividly described in the picture, a man on a boat , using a telescope, wants to find with great effort if there are some fish distantly. However hard he works, he fails to find any fish, for the net is still empty. Amusingly, it happens that a school of fish is swimming just nearby, but he completely turns a blind eye to them.

　　②In the picture, a man on a boat is searching for some fish with a telescope. However, his efforts do not pay off, for the net is still empty. Amusingly, a school of fish is swimming just nearby, but he completely ignores them.

　　③The cartoon portrays a vivid picture in which there is a boy, a boat, an empty net, and a school of fish. To be more specific, the major character, using a telescope, is struggling to search for some fish, neglecting the ones swimming around him. Ironically, his efforts do not pay off simply because of his wrong aim and attitude.

　　二、解议图解议图

　　从不同角度去看，对漫画就有不同的解读。但是只要我们联系现实生活，找到与画面主旨相对应的现实素材展开联想解读这幅漫画的意义及其寓意。从画面与现实的“”中，确定话题及立意的方向。确定好立意之后，先写出主题句，再展开议论。议论要联系实际，摆事实，讲道理。只要是逻辑合理，立意可以是多样的。立意在立意过程中尽量要贴近题意，领会出题者的意图从图中我们贴近此题题意的立意为不要好高骛远，目标要实际。主题句不要好高骛远，目标要实际。What the picture conveys is that we should never aim too high, neglecting the readily attainable goal.

　　②What the story tries to convey is that we high school students should not set a goal out of our reach, ignoring the attainable and accomplishable goal.

　　③The message conveyed in the picture is clear. That is, when we set a goal, we should not aim too high, but within our reach.

　　④The picture conveys us a message that we should set an impractical goal instead of one out of our reach.

　　2.展开议论联系实际，摆事实，讲道理If the man stopped focusing on the distant waters and looked around, the fish near the boat would be an easy harvest for him. This is not uncommon in our daily life. When we aim to build one ridiculously large project, we complete nothing. When we aim for a small goal, we complete it. Let’s be more practical.

　　②The boy would harvest more with less hardship only if he abandoned the distant goal and turned back to focus on the fish around the boat. Such phenomenon seems fairly common in our daily life. Sometimes, we teenagers tend to stick to a target which is beyond our grasp when faced with problems, which will surely lead us to a wrong way and finally in failure.

　　③In reality, not only will an impractical goal mislead us, but also keeps us away from victory. This kind of phenomenon is not uncommon nowadays among the younger generation. Owing to the anxiety for achievement, we frequently ignore the consideration of surroundings and reach for what is beyond our grasp, which eventually causes failure. On the contrary, as long as we work out a practical scheme before taking action, the target should be beaten more conveniently.

　　三、圆图圆图，再申主旨，力求完整、有力。起到升华观点，画龙点睛的作用。

　　②In conclusion, it is highly recommended that practical aim be set in our life. Only when we realize the great importance of it can we lead a successful life.

　　参考答案（一）

　　As is vividly described in the picture, a man on a boat , using a telescope, wants to find with great effort if

　　there are some fish distantly. However hard he works, he fails to find any fish, for the net is still empty. Amusingly, it happens that a school of fish is swimming just nearby, but he completely turns a blind eye to them.

　　What the picture conveys is that we should never aim too high, neglecting the readily参考答案（二）

　　The cartoon portrays a vivid picture in which there is a man, a boat, an empty net, and a school of fish. To be more specific, the major character, using a telescope, is struggling to search for some fish, neglecting the ones swimming around him. Ironically, his efforts do not pay off simply because of his wrong aim and attitude.

　　What the story tries to convey is that we high school students should not set a goal out of our reach, ignoring the attainable and accomplishable goal. The man would harvest more with less hardship only if he abandoned the distant goal and turned back to focus on the fish around the boat. Such phenomenon seems fairly common in our daily life. Sometimes, we teenagers tend to stick to a target which is beyond our grasp when faced with problems, which will surely lead us to a wrong way and finally in failure.

　　In conclusion, it is highly recommended that practical aim be set in our life. Only when we realize the utter importance of it can we lead a successful life.

　　同步练习

　　In your spoken English class, your teacher shows you the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.

　　参考答案（一）

　　In the picture, a man is rowing a boat with great difficulty. However, the water in the river is too shallow for the boat to move on. Obviously, it is difficult to move the boat no matter how hard he tries.

　　The picture tries to convey the message that it is important to build a solid foundation if we want to succeed. We can learn this lesson in real life. Take study for example. If we don’t have basic knowledge and essential ability, we may fail to achieve our goals even if we work hard. Just like the man in the picture, he can’t move forward as expected because water is not deep enough for the boat.

　　Therefore, a good foundation is the key to success.

　　参考答案（二）

　　As can be seen from the picture, a man is trying really hard to move the paddles to make his boat go ahead. However, he actually is stuck there since the river is too shallow for the boat to move on.

　　I think the picture conveys the message that we should find proper ways according to the situations when faced with problems. The man in the picture doesn’t consider the depth of the river so he chooses a wrong way to move the boat and end up making effort in vain. Similarly in or solve problems more efficiently.