2016届山东省胶州市高考英语二轮写作赏析精编（3）

　　山东省胶州市2016高考英语（二轮）写作赏析精编（3）及参考范文

　　【浙江省2016模拟冲刺试题】书面表达 (满分30分)

　　”为题，写一篇短文介绍你的好朋友王佳。要点如下：

　　1、你的好朋友王佳是英语课代表（English representative），英语成绩好, 课堂表现出色。2、她高一时英语演讲比赛获奖，还代表学校参加了在上海举办的英语辩论赛（the English Debating Competition），英语交际能力强。3、她生活态度乐观向上,充满热情……

　　注意：1．词数。2.不可逐条翻译。English representative in our class. In my mind, she is outstanding in the English class with a great sense of reflection and always willing to share.

　　In Senior One, Wang Jia successfully got the prize at the final English speaking contest. What’s more, she represented the school to attend the English Debating Competition in Shanghai. She is the girl who has great English communicating ability. Besides, she always puts her enthusiasm into her study and homework. She has an optimism attitude to life, and never gives up.

　　I am glad to have such a nice friend and have the opportunity to study together with her. I fully believe Wang Jia has the potential to be successful and I hope our friendship will last forever.

　　【山东省2016仿真模拟冲刺卷】写作（满分30分）

　　近年来，随着私家车的增加，城市交通越来越拥挤。在中、小学生上学或放学时，校门口以及学校附近拥挤问题更加严重。这给学生、教师、家长和其他市民带来许多不便。尤其值得注意的是，学校附近的交通堵塞也存在不可忽略的隐患。为此，这引起了不少民众的担忧。你作为一名在校学生，署名张小明，根据以下要点写一封英语信，向本校英语报投稿。1．为什么要写这封英语信。

　　2．你们学校门口及附近交通拥挤的原因。

　　3．提出二至三条建议。

　　注意：词数120左右。

　　Dear Editor,

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　　Yours,

　　Zhang Xiaoming

　　【参考范文】

　　Dear Editor,

　　I’m Zhang Xiaoming, a student from Grade 3．I am writing to discuss the traffic problem near our school gate.

　　With so many parents coming to pick up their children, traffic jams are frequent near the school gate, causing much inconvenience to us students as well as our teachers and passers-by．Many people have been worrying about the hidden traffic problems．So I strongly recommend some effective and urgent measures be taken．First, we should encourage students to ride their bicycles or walk to school by themselves instead of taking cars, which will not only help reduce the jam but benefit students’ health as well．It is also a good idea to allow junior students to leave school 10 minutes earlier than others．Besides, cars should not be allowed to park near the school gate.

　　I do hope my suggestions can be considered and the problem can be solved soon.

　　Yours,

　　Zhang Xiaoming

　　【江西省九江市2016二模】书面表达（满分25分距离高考剩下不到时间了，紧张的备考已经拉开序幕，但是很多同学还不知如何处理学习、健身休息与高考备考之间的关系。请根据写一篇英语短文，谈一谈你对这一问题的建议。注意：

　　1.词数10字左右，开头语已为你写好；

　　可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。How to Get Prepared for the College Entrance Exams

　　The College Entrance Examination is drawing near. _______________________________

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　　【参考范文】

　　The College Entrance Examination is drawing near. However, most students of senior three don’t know how to connect rest, doing exercise with study. In their eyes they should sacrifice their rest time in order to get high scores, which results in poor health and low efficiency of learning. (48)

　　Just as a famous saying goes: all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. we should be aware that nothing is more valuable than health which is a foundation of success. Therefore, on the one hand, we should make preparations for the exam fully and systematically. On the other hand, we should relieve stress by means of relaxation and doing sports. (111)

　　In conclusion, only when we have adequate rest and doing some sports can we study more efficiently. (128)

　　2016书面表达训练

　　随着人们生活水平的提高，越来越多的家庭拥有了私家车。你们班同学就此现象展开了一次讨论，提出两种不同的观点和看法。假如你是赵凯，请你根据下表提供的信息，给《学生双语》报社写一封信，客观介绍这两种看法。

　　赞同者认为 反对者认为

　　1. 方便快捷舒适的 交通工具；

　　2. 反映出生活水平提高，国家富强；

　　3. 带动其它行业发展。 1. 废气污染严重；

　　2. 影响交通，导致更多事故，危及行人安全；

　　3. 停车问题日益突出。

　　注意：1. 信的开头和结尾已给出。 2. 词数：120左右。3. 参考词汇：危及endanger

　　范文：

　　Dear Editor,

　　I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we recently had about whether or not it is good for families to own cars.

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　　In short, people should think twice before buying a car.

　　Yours

　　Zhao Kai

　　【参考范文】

　　Test 11

　　Dear Sir,

　　My name is Li Hua, from Hope High School in Yinchuan. I’m glad to get the news that Hong Kong University will have independent recruitment in mainland, so I would like to apply for it.

　　I am eighteen, studying in Senior 3. I am sociable, easy－going and good at communicating with others. Besides, I am quite independent and it is easy for me to adapt to a new environment. As a senior student, I have been working hard at my lessons and managed to get high grades. All these will enable me to continue my study in your university. What’s more, my hobbies are playing basketball and football and I am also good at playing the violin.

　　Looking forward to your reply.

　　Yours sincerely，

　　Li Hua

　　广东省高三考前冲刺卷基础写作(共1小题，满分15分)

　　假设你们学校最近就你们所在的城市是否应该发展旅游业(tourism)作为研究性课程的内容进行课题讨论，请你根据下面所给出的要点提示，写一个在讨论会上的英语发言稿(讨论会将有外籍教师参加)。

　　写作内容

　　1．发展旅游业给当地经济发展和人民生活带来的好处；

　　2．旅游业过快发展的弊端；

　　3．你的看法。

　　写作要求

　　1．只能使用5个句子表达全部内容；

　　2．内容可适当发挥，注意行文连贯。

　　评分标准

　　句子结构准确，信息内容完整，语篇连贯。

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　　基础写作参考范文Tourism can benefit us a great deal.For one thing，it will help the city’s economy and advance the well­being of local people; for another，we will have nice parks，the first­class roads and grand buildings and also we will get lots of chances to communicate with tourists from all over the world.

　　If tourism grows too quickly，people will move from their early jobs to those concerning tourism and local industry will suffer.Too many tourists can crowd public places and cause some pollution.

　　I think it is necessary to develop tourism but first of all we should have a proper plan so that tourism should be developed steadily and efficiently.

　　2016书面表达训练

　　假如你是李华，你的美国网友Jack目前正在一家孔子学院学习汉语，你们俩约定每周都给对方写一封信，他用汉语，你用英语，以期相互学习和帮助。最近你收到他发来的一封电子邮件，请你根据下列提示用英语给他写一封回信：

　　1. 表扬他的进步，并指出来信中的错误；

　　2. 给他一些改进的具体建议；

　　3. 你将发给他一篇游记，期待他对你的邮件进行回复。

　　注意：1. 词数：80-120；

　　2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

　　Dear Jack,

　　I’m just so glad to receive your regular letter. ____________________________________

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　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　【参考范文】

　　Dear Jack,

　　I’m just so glad to receive your regular letter.

　　I’m proud to tell you that you have made rapid progress in such a short time! You letter is better written than the last one. Obviously, you have mastered how to use some Chinese characters freely. But it doesn’t mean there’s no problem at all. For instance, unlike English, we usually use “因为……所以……” in one sentence. So you should correct the fourth sentence in your letter. And I advise you to do more reading and try to use these sentence patterns in your writing as possible as you can.

　　I wrote a travel journal about our trip to a natural park yesterday. I’ll send it to you later. If there is any mistake in my writing, please tell me and correct it for me. I’m sure we both will make great progress this way.

　　I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon.