2016届山东省胶州市高考英语二轮写作赏析精编（4）

　　山东省胶州市2016高考英语（二轮）写作赏析精编（4）及参考范文

　　2016书面表达训练

　　假设你是李华，准备参加学校举办的主题为“健康成长”的英语作文比赛。请按要求写一篇短文，主要内容包括：

　　1.乐观的人生态度；

　　2.努力学习；

　　3.参加体育锻炼。

　　注意：1.词数100左右；

　　2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

　　3. 文章的开头已给出不计入总次数。

　　We all want to grow up happily and healthily, and for this goal we must do several things.

　　We all want to grow up happily and healthily, and for this goal we must do several things.

　　Firstly, we should develop a good attitude to life. Life consists of not only sunshine but also hard times. We should be brave in face of difficulties. Secondly, we must study hard because knowledge is power. If we have the power, we can help to build our country and enjoy life better. In order to study well, we need to do sports so that we can keep fit. We can go running, play ball games or simply take a walk after a day’s study. If we do those things well, we will be able to grow up happily and healthily.

　　【广东省高三考前冲刺卷】

　　基础写作(共1小题，满分15分)

　　下面是易趣网上关于小说《心灵鸡汤》的广告。假设你是李华，请用英语给你的笔友陈伟写一封信，建议他上网购买。

　　写作内容

　　推荐理由和购买方法等广告中的所有汉语内容。

　　写作要求

　　1．只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容；

　　2．信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总句数。

　　评分标准

　　句子结构准确，信息内容完整，语篇连贯。

　　Dear Chen Wei，

　　How are you doing?

　　Recently an American bestseller is popular among the students in our school.I read it and to my excitement，it was really inspiring.I would like to recommend it to you.

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　　To get more information，you can visit the website. Get one and enjoy it!

　　Best wishes.

　　Yours，

　　Li Hua

　　基础写作【参考范文】

　　Dear Chen Wei，

　　How are you doing?

　　Recently an American bestseller is popular among the students in our school.I read it and to my excitement，it was really inspiring.I would like to recommend it to you.

　　This book，Chicken Soup for the Soul，written by Jack Canfield，first appeared in 1993 and soon became a bestseller.The book will surely inspire readers of all ages and it has been translated into tens of languages，spreading love all over the world.Besides，the book has an English version，which will be of great help to English learners.Its price is 38 yuan，but you can get it for 29 yuan through online shopping，which will save you 9 yuan.You can order it at www.ebay.com.cn and get the book within 24－28 hours after your payment.

　　To get more information，you can visit the website.Get one and enjoy it!

　　Best wishes.

　　Yours，

　　Li Hua

　　【广东省高三考前冲刺卷读写任务(共1小题，满分25分)

　　阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

　　China Bans Free Plastic Bags

　　China began a crackdown on plastic bags，banning production of thin bags and forbidding supermarkets and shops from handing them out free，Tuesday，June 1,2008.

　　Chinese people use up to 3 billion plastic bags a day and the country has to refine 5 million tons of oil every year to make plastics used for packaging，according to a report on the website of China Trade News，and fails to get rid of them properly，wasting valuable oil and littering the country，the State Council said in a notice posted on the Central Government’s Website.

　　“Our country consumes huge quantities of plastic bags every year.While providing convenience to consumers，they have also caused serious pollution，waste of energy and resources，because of too much use and inadequate recycling，” it said.

　　Worries about pollution are growing among ordinary citizens，as years of breakneck growth has a very bad effect on the country’s air and water，but the new ban may not be universally welcomed.

　　写作内容

　　1．以约30个词概括短文的要点。

　　2．然后以约120个词就“‘为了环保和节能，禁止商场免费提供塑料袋’的禁令与方便老百姓日常生活的矛盾”这一中心发表看法，并包括如下要点：

　　(1)你对国家这一禁令的看法，并说明你的理由；

　　(2)禁令实施后，消费者该怎么办？

　　写作要求

　　1．可以使用实例或分项论述的方法支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

　　2．文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

　　评分标准

　　概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

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　　读写任务参考范文Worried about environmental issues and a severe waste of resources，China will ban the free plastic bags，but it may not be universally welcomed while they provide convenience to consumers.

　　I think the ban is good both for us and for the whole world，which can reduce waste and save resources.As we know，oil is non­renewable resource.Overuse of oil will bring us a series of troubles.Overuse of plastic bags will bring us lots of diseases.So，we can not wait to stop using them.Many countries，including those with developed economy，have bitten the bullet and banned plastic bags.

　　But everything is two­sided.For the time being，people have really got used to using them，and they do give us lots of convenience.If we forbid using plastic bags，we should find ways to solve the problem.We consumers ought to bring cloth bags or shopping baskets instead of plastic bags.

　　【北京市丰台区2016统一模拟】第一节（15分）

　　假设你是红星中学高二(1)班的学生李华，下个月英国Saint Gorge High School的交换学生要来你校学习。学校招募接待家庭。请你根据以下信息，提出申请并说明理由。

　　1. 家里住宿条件好；

　　2. 英语听说能力强；

　　3. 了解英国人的文化习俗。

　　注意：1. 词数不少于50；

　　2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

　　3. 开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　第一节

　　应用类作文（15分）

　　一、评分原则：

　　1. 本题总分为15分，按4个档次给分。

　　2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言质量初步确定其档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。

　　3. 评分时应考虑：内容是否完整，条理是否清楚，交际是否得体，语言是否规范。

　　4. 拼写、标点符号或书写影响内容表达时，应视其影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。

　　5. 词数少于50，从总分中减去1分。

　　二、各档次给分范围和要求：

　　第一档 完全完成了试题规定的任务。

　　·内容完整，条理清楚；

　　·交际得体，表达时充分考虑到交际对象的需求；

　　体现出较强的语言运用能力。

　　完全达到了预期的写作目的。

　　13分—15分

　　第二档

　　基本完成了试题规定的任务。

　　·内容、条理和交际等方面基本符合要求；

　　·运用的语法和词汇基本满足任务要求；

　　·语法或用词方面有一些错误，但不影响理解。

　　基本达到了预期的写作目的。

　　9分—12分

　　第三档 未恰当完成试题规定的任务。

　　·所用词汇有限，语法或用词方面的错误影响了对所写内容的理解，未

　　能清楚地传达信息。

　　4分—8分

　　第四档 未完成试题规定的任务。

　　·写了少量相关信息；

　　·语法或用词方面错误较多，严重影响了对写作内容的理解。

　　1分—3分

　　0分 未传达任何信息；所写内容与要求无关。

　　三、Possible versions

　　Possible version 1

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I would like to host a student from Saint George High School. My house is big enough to give him a room to live in. Also, I am good at English listening and speaking. I have studied a lot about British culture and customs. I can create a welcoming atmosphere for him. I would be very happy, if you give me this opportunity.

　　Thank you!

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua (65 words)

　　Possible version 2

　　Dear Sir or Madam,

　　I feel very excited to know that the exchange students from Saint Gorge High School will come and study at our school. I would like to be a host family. The reasons are as follows:

　　First, my home is big with three bedrooms and two bathrooms. This makes it possible for me to provide the exchange student with good living accommodations. Moreover, I have a good command of English and I am good at listening and speaking. I would be able to communicate with the student easily. In addition, I have a good understanding of British customs and culture, allowing us to have a lot to talk about.

　　Because of the above mentioned reasons I am applying to be a host family. I sincerely hope I will be granted this great opportunity.

　　Thank you very much!

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua (136 words)