湖南省长沙县实验中学2016届高三英语二轮复习书面表达复习重点话题指导专题06 记叙概括话题指导（教师版）

　　【写作任务】

　　请根据下列提示以An Unforgettable Class为题写一篇120—150词左右的英语短文。

　　L今天上课时王老师宣布做一个游戏；

　　2．王老师在黑板上画了一张没有眼睛的脸，让我们补画眼睛；

　　3．李平自告奋勇上去，被蒙上眼睛后却把眼睛画在了额头上；

　　4．老师的许价及习作者的感悟。命题思路：实践证明，记叙文体的书面表达无论在平时英语测试中，还是在高考英语试题中，均频频出现。命题形式主要有两种：提纲式和图画式。

　　【参考范文】

　　An Unforgettable Class

　　Wehad a most interesting class this morning. We became excited when Mr Wang said,

　　"Let's play a game together." We were eager to know what kind of game it would be.

　　Mr

　　Wang

　　said

　　nothing

　　but

　　turned

　　to

　　the blackboard. At once a face without eyes appeared on the blackboard. "Please add the eyes to the face," Mr Wang said. Oh, what an interesting job!

　　Li Ping volunteered to finish the task and at the same time his eyes were covered by a piece of cloth. Li Ping went to the board. We burst into laughter when he turned around. The eyes were on the forehead! How funny it looked!

　　What a good lesson Mr Wang gave impressed us deeply.

　　实例指导2—记一次宣传抽烟的危害”的活动

　　【写作任务】

　　上周学校组织学生参加了一次“宣传抽烟的危害”的活动。作为其中的一名志愿者，请你用英语讲述一下这次你做志愿者的经历。词数：120--150。

　　可以适当增加细节，使上下文连贯。

　　【写作指导】

　　to start with, further , secondly, still, furthemore, third , thirdly , what’s more , last but not least, also, and then, next, moreover , besides, finally等。

　　【学生习作】

　　To persuade

　　people

　　to

　　give

　　up

　　smoking，I volunteered in an activity ①organizing by our school last week whose theme was the dangers of smoking .

　　In the morning we met at the School gate，and then we went to the nearest park，②which many people were doing morning exercise．We had a discussion there，which attracted more attention．Next，we gave out brochures where there was knowledge of the dangers of smoking to people around．At the same time , more and more people came to ask some questions．③It's smoking that ruin their bright future. They have really learned a lot from this activity.

　　With the help of us ，more and more people have ④made up their mind to give up smoking．We have really learned a lot from this activity . We realized that only

　　if we try to avoid bad habits can we enjoy the true happiness of life.

　　从整体上看基本完成了写作任务，运用一般过去时以第一人称描述了发生在上周的事情，符合题目要求。同时，作者在写作过程中思路比较清晰，运用了一些衔接词，如：and then，next， at the same time等，考虑到了运用一些高级词汇或短语，如：volunteer大部分情况下我们会把它当名词来用但作者把它当动词来用，这点很好。但是作者在用④make up one’s mind这个短语时没有注意到mind之前是复数their ，应用minds。句式结构上正确运用了倒装，但在运用非谓语动词、定语从句以及主谓一致方面出现了错误。例如：①处organize 与它的逻辑主语之间是被动关系，应用organized；②处使用的是定语从句，先行词是the nearest park，在从句中作地点状语，应用where引导；③处使用了强调句型但没有注意到主谓一致的问题，应改为ruins。

　　【参考范文】

　　Last week our school organized an activity whose theme was the dangers of smoking．As a vo1unteer of this activity，I got a good command of knowledge which is good for our health.

　　Firstly，we had a Class meeting Which made us realize the dangers of smoking．Next we told people that smoking did great harm not only to our health but also to our mind，especially for us teenagers．And then many people came to ask us some questions．What impressed me most was a Senoir 3 student who became addicted to smoking because of the pressure of the following college Entrance Examination．With our efforts he decide to stops smoking．

　　NOW more and more people have made up their minds to

　　give up smoking．We should study hard and make progress every day．We Should form good habits so that we can spend most of our time learning thing useful and valuable．

　　实例指导3—Our Spring Outing

　　【写作任务】

　　假设你是红星中学高三、‘班的学生李华；为校刊英语园地写一篇题为“Our Spring Outing”的英文稿。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，叙述上周你们班准备春游到春游结束的完整过程。

　　注意：词数不少于60. 提示词： 游乐园 amusement park 垃圾箱 bin

　　要根据具体情况选用时态。

　　5．多在塑造人物、展开情节上下功夫，使文章引人胜。

　　[写作注意事项]

　　1．在记叙文中，不要过多地使用“I”，“We…”这样句型，以免给人乏味的感觉。在以第三人称进行叙述时，要避免过多的评论而失去客观性。

　　2．尽管采用倒叙、插叙等方法可产生某种特定的效果，但就目前中学生的实际英语水平而言，最值得提倡的还是顺叙的记叙顺序，因为这种顺序无论从时态，是过渡词等方面都较容易掌握。

　　3．要紧紧围绕主题，并尽量避免加入过多主观判断。

　　4．由于有写作时间和字数的限制，叙述时要详略得当。

　　【学生习作】

　　Our Spring Outing

　　Last Thursday, we had a class meeting to discuss where to go for our spring outing. We came up with several choices such as going boating, climbing a mountain, and going to an amusement park. Finally, we decided to go mountain climbing.

　　The next day, we set off early in the morning. While climbing the mountain, we enjoyed the warm sunshine and a beautiful view. However, when reached the top, we were shocked to see litter here and there, such as bottles and banana peels. Then we started to pick up the litter. Afterwards, we put the rubbish into the nearby recycling bin and non-recycling bin respectively. We were tired but happy.

　　【教师点评】

　　范文用第——人称描写了“我”和同学们春游的经过，且涵盖了四幅图的内容，并注意运用了一些较高级词汇，如：came up with，respectively等。同时也运用了一些较复杂句式，如：However，when reached the top，we…等，使文章增色不少。更为可贵的是，文章连贯性较强，运用了诸如finally，the next day，however等关联词或词组。

　　实例指导4—《双城记》

　　【写作任务】

　　《双城记》是狄更斯有名的一篇小说。请你根据下列内容，写一篇故事梗概，简单介绍这篇小说。

　　1．背景：法国大革命时期的巴黎和伦敦。

　　2．主要角色：马奈特医生(Dr. Manette)、

　　厄弗里蒙侯爵兄弟(the Marquis Evremonde)等。

　　3．情节：法国革命前，一个名叫马奈特的外科医生因为向政府揭发贵族厄弗里蒙兄弟将农村的一对兄妹无端迫害致死的罪行，被持有贵族特权的厄弗里蒙兄弟所陷害，马奈特医生平

　　白无辜地被投入巴士底监狱，在狱中被关了整整18年。后来，厄弗里蒙侯爵失去恩宠，马奈特医生才获释出狱。1739年法国大革命的风暴终于袭来了。巴黎人民攻占了巴士底狱，把贵族一个个送上断头台。

　　注意：文章总词数：120左右；

　　2)参考词汇：陷害frame；恩宠disfavor； 巴士底监狱出the Bastille prison。

　　1）认真阅读文章，读懂文章，弄清楚各部分的内容及相互间的联系。

　　2）弄清楚文章哪些内容是主要内容，哪些是次要内容。

　　3）写的时候注意：与主要内容关系不大的可用三言两语适当交待一下，主要内容则要用平实、简练的语言概括出来。文中不要出现人物对话，应用叙述的语言描述一番，要注意故事的连贯性。

　　2．故事概括类文章一般要包括以下内容：

　　1）故事发生的背景：即故事发生的时间和地点。

　　2）故事中的主要人物。

　　3）故事情节。

　　4）故事的结局。

　　3．这类文章一般具有以下语言特点：

　　1）时态以一般现在时为主。

　　2）人称相对统一，主要采用第三人称。

　　【范文欣赏】

　　A tale of two cities , written by Dickens，is set in Paris and London at the time of the French Revolution．The main characters in the story are Dr. Manette who is a doctor and the Marquis Evremonde.

　　Before the French Revolution, Dr. Manette is framed and put in the Bastille Prison by

　　the Marquis Evremonde and his brother because of his exposing their crime of causing a boy and his younger sister's death without reason. And he is in prison for up to eighteen years. Afterwards, the

　　Marquis Evremonde is disfavored and Dr Manette is set free. When the French Revolution happened ha 1739, people took over the Bastille Prison. In the end, all the noblemen are executed one by one.

　　实战演练

　　请根据下面的汉语提示，用英语写一篇电影介绍。

　　片名：《一个都不能少》

　　导演：张艺谋

　　主演：魏敏芝

　　故事梗概：一所小学中，唯一的老师有事请假，13岁的魏敏芝来当代课老师。“一个都不能少”是她最重要的任务。班上最调皮的男孩逃学，魏敏芝想尽一切办法到城里找他。最后在好心人的帮助下，他们一起回到了学校。

　　特点：影片中多数人用的是真实的姓名。

　　评论：情节感人

　　注意：

　　请不要逐句翻译，注意文章的连贯

　　词数：120左右

　　参考词汇；《一个都不能少》Not one less

　　place , ask sb. to do sth. ; the most important thing is for her to do …; unluckily, try one’s best to do …; with the help of … , take back

　　第三步：简单评论：参考的词汇和句型：why we like reading / seeing …, we like to see/ read it because , not just …but also ,

　　if you don’t like , you may …

　　【参考范文】

　　Not One Less , which was directed by Zhang Yimou , is a simple but attractive story. As soon it was shown , it was received well by people.

　　The story happens in a primary school. The only teacher has to leave because of some reason, so a girl of 13, played by Wei Minzhi, is asked to take his place. The most important thing for her is not to lose any pupil. Unluckily, the naughtiest boy runs away from the school. Minzhi goes to the town and tries her best to find him. At last with the help of some kind-hearted people, she finds him and takes him back to their school.

　　Many people like this film not just because the story is moving, but also because most of the people in the film use their real names and play themselves.

　　下列图画描述了查尔斯太太为丈夫买上衣后的经历，请根据图画内容，用英语写一篇 90-120 词左右的短文，以便刊登在 GUIDE TO ENGLISH TESTS 上。

　　注意：

　　1. 题目自拟：

　　2. 短文应包括图中要点。

　　Mr. Charles and His New Shirt

　　One day Mrs. Charles went to a department store and bought a beautiful shirt for her husband. When she got back home with the shirt her husband was smoking in the sofa with a newspaper in his hand. Mrs. Charles asked her husband to try on the news shirt， but it was too large. Suddenly she came upon a good idea. She put the shirt into a basin of hot water， dried it and asked her husband to put it on， but it was too small， which made Charles quite unhappy. When their son saw this， he made fun of his father. Then Mrs. Charles made her son try on the new shirt， but it was too large for the little boy. Mr. Charles couldn't help laughing at this.

　　　下列图画描述的是你的一段亲身经历，请根据此图为一家中学生英文报的故事专栏写一篇短文。

　　注意：

　　1 . 短文必须包括图画所表现的主要内容，可以适当增减细节，使其连贯、完整；

　　2. 叙述必须用第一人称；

　　3. 词数 100 左右。

　　生词：违章者 offender n. 十字路口 crossroad（s） n.

　　The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle. My brother was riding with me sitting on the seat behind. As we came to the crossroads a young man and a girl came up and stopped us. “ We’ve found you at long last， ” they said， but we didn’t know them. Pointing to a policeman not far away， the young man explained， “ He stopped us about an hour ago and made us catch the next offender. So come on， stand here. Hope you don ' t have to wait as long as we did. Good luck. ”

　　一个星期天的上午，小丽和爸爸一起去公园，碰见了下图所发生的事情。请根据提示和图画内容，用英语写一则小故事，以便刊登在某一对外发行的英语刊物上。

　　[注意] 1. 短文必须包括图画所表现的主要内容，可以适当增减细节，使其连贯、完整；

　　2. 词数：100－120.

　　[精品范文] One Sunday morning Xiao Li and her father went to the People’s Park together. Walking around the park， they found a girl crying by a road. They went up to her， asking what her name was and where she lived. But the girl knew nothing about it. So they had to send her to the police station of the park， where she was taken good care of. The news of the lost girl was broadcast in no time. After some time in came the parents of the girl. They were excited to see their child and expressed their thanks to Xiao Li and her father. Then they said good-bye to each other.

　　某对外发行的英文刊物正在进行中学生英语征文，请根据下列提示，以Don’t Lose Your Courage为题写一篇短文，以便向该刊投稿。

　　[提示]

　　1. 上高一的第一天；

　　2. 英语老师刘老师面带微笑进入教室；

　　3. 她自我介绍，应称呼她Miss Liu，而非Teacher Liu；

　　4. 要求我们每人到教室前自我介绍；

　　5. 我又怕又羞难以启齿；

　　　6. 老师鼓励我，我讲得很好；

　　7. 难忘的第一节课；

　　8. 实践出真知。遇到困难不能灰心丧气。

　　Don’t Lose Your Courage

　　Never shall I forget the first English lesson given by Miss Liu. On that day， when she entered the classroom， we found that she was a young and beautiful lady with a big smile on her face. Then she introduced herself saying that we should call her Miss Liu instead of Teacher Liu， a moment later， she let all of us go to the blackboard and say something about ourselves in English in turn. When it was my turn， I felt so shy and fearful that I didn’t dare to say a word before the class. She came up to me and said kindly， “Don’t be afraid. I believe you can do it. Come and have a try.” My face turned red when I heard that. At last， I went to the blackboard and was able to do it quite well. She praised for what I had done. Up to now， I can still remember her words in the first English lesson： “Practice makes perfect. Don’t lose your courage when you meet with difficulties. Try on and on until you succeed.”

　　 假设你在寒假期间义务给社区里的初中生补习英语,今天你要用英文给他们讲安徒生的童话故事:The Emperor’s New Suit。请根据下面的简介简单叙述一下该故事。词数150左右。

　　简介:    有一个皇帝非常喜爱漂亮的衣服。有两个陌生人来到国都,谎称自己能做出世上最漂亮的衣裳,而且他们的衣裳"只有聪明的、有能力胜任自己工作的人才看得见"。皇帝穿着"新衣"在城里炫耀,所有的臣民都说这衣服好看,只有一个小孩指着皇帝,大声喊:"皇帝什么都没有穿！"

　　Long long time ago, there was an Emperor who was only interested in buying and wearing new clothes. One day two strangers came to the capital. They said they could make the most beautiful suit in the world, but the suit would be invisible to anyone who did not have enough wisdom or were unfit to do their job.      The day came when the two tailors finished their suit and presented it to the Emperor. The Emperor and all the people present saw nothing in their hands, but they all pretended to see it. The Emperor walked around the entire city with it on and everyone yelled out that it was the best suit that they had ever seen. No one in the city wanted his neighbor to think him stupid or unfit for the job.      However, a young boy who stood in front of the crowd then pointed at the Emperor and said, "The Emperor is not wearing anything at all! "