【课堂新坐标】2017届高考英语（通用版）二轮复习书面表达专题训练：技法5 高级的词汇复杂的句式（含解析）

　　技法5| 高级的词汇复杂的句式

　　写作时高级词汇与复杂句式”如能运用得贴切自然哪怕整篇文章只用上一两处也会为你的作文增光添彩。1. 使用高(1)标新立异写作时恰当得体地使用高中学过的、别人可能想不到的词汇会给阅卷人耳目一新的感觉。但是需注意：既要避免使用俗词又要避开冷僻词汇。too much homework to do at the weekend.

　　→We have endless homework to do at the weekend.

　　In the coming three years, our school life will be difficult.

　　→ In the coming three years, our school life will be challenging.

　　He didn't listen to what I said in the class.

　　→ He turned a deaf ear to what I said in the class.

　　So long as we hold fast to our ideals and never give up, we are sure to achieve success.

　　→ So long as we hold fast to our ideals and never give up, we are bound to achieve success.

　　(2)短语优先多使用词组、习语来代替一些单词以增加文采。important.

　　→ Developing a good habit is also of importance.

　　I can no longer bear the way he speaks to us.

　　→I can no longer put up with the way he speaks to us.

　　What's more, we can pour out the troubles we face, and release our pressure from different aspects.

　　→What's more, we can pour out the troubles we are faced with, and release our pressure from different aspects.

　　As the number of English learners is increasing, it's not difficult for them to understand these words in Chinese contexts.

　　→ As the number of English learners is on the rise, it's not difficult for them to understand these words in Chinese contexts.

　　2. 使用复杂句式(1)复合句复合句包括定语从句、名词性从句(主语从句、宾语从句、表语从句和同位语从句)和状语从句。who has experienced no storm will never become an excellent sailor.(定语从句)What impressed me most was that they had had professional training. (主语从句和表语从句)whether you can pick him up at the airport.(宾语从句)that we should go to help them overcome the present difficulty.(同位语从句)As long as you keep on trying, you will surely succeed.(状语从句)(2)非谓语动词与with复合结构非谓语动词包括不定式、动名词和分词(现在分词和过去分词)特别是with复合结构的应用更是写作中的一大亮点。to be done in our educational work.

　　Touched by the teacher's words，we decided to work hard.

　　Knowing that our library is going to buy books, I'd like to give some suggestions.

　　With the society developing rapidly, it's necessary for us to have a good command of English and computer.

　　(2015·四川高考)假如你是李夏。你看到美国留学生Sharon在网上发帖希望有人能帮助她提高普通话(Mandarin)水平她可以教英语作为回报。请根据以下提示用英语给她写一封电子邮件。

　　表达给她提供帮助的意愿；

　　说明你能胜任辅导的理由；

　　给出讲好普通话的两点建议；

　　提出你学习英语的具体需求。

　　注意：

　　120左右开头语已为你写好；

　　可以适当增加细节以使行文连贯；

　　文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称。

　　This is Li Xia.I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin.

　　Li Xia

　　考生作文 点评与优化 作文提升

　　This is Li Xia.I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin.I am very glad to help you.

　　First of all，I have spoken Mandarin for about 17 years.And I have helped two exchange

　　students

　　with their learning Mandarin in the past two years.I'm sure I

　　can do very well.

　　We all know that language learning needs lots of practice and Mandarin learning also needs lots of practice.We must use every time to practice it.Because to practice a lot is very important.Keeping a diary also helps us to improve it.

　　You said that you would teach English in return.I very need it，so it is very good for me.

　　Look forward to your reply！

　　Li Xia [名师点评]

　　本文的词数符合要求但是由于缺少高级的表达而影响了文章的档次。

　　本文在高级词汇方面使用较少有些词汇是可以升级的。例如very可升级为more than可升级为give a helping hand可升级为to begin/start with可升级为call for等。

　　本文使用的复合句也是寥寥无几适当地使用一些复合句和非谓语动词会提升文章的档次使阅卷人愿意为

　　[尝试优化]

　　This is Li Xia.I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin.I am more than glad to give a helping hand.To start with，I have been speaking Mandarin for about 17 years.And I have helped two exchange students with their Mandarin learning.So I'm confident that I will do it well.

　　As is always the case with language learning，Mandarin learning also asks for lots of practice.To practice as much as possible is where the secret lies.Besides，keeping a Mandarin diary also helps a lot.

　　You mentioned that you would like to teach English in return，which is exactly what I am dying for.I badly need to improve my oral English，so it is great for me to find a native speaker to learn from.

　　Looking forward to your reply！