2014年5月SAT真题作文修改实例

　　Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?

　　首先审题，理解成创新类别，也就是让各位考生写一个因为创新所以成功的故事。同笔者课上复习的这个题目很类似：Is creativity needed more than ever in the world today? 怎么回答呢?结合5月考题，自然是需要创造力，因为有了能成功。

　　归纳来看，结合去年下半年的考题，大家会发现，美国考官一直在对这个问题进行考察。比如去年11月要不要挑战新想法，你可以写不要，因为新想法就是创造力会让大家成功。去年12月考要不要挑战权威，自然是写要，挑战权威，提出新想法，个人和社会才会更好。再看今年5月份，还是强调不要从众，要有自己的个性。

　　我给大家找了一篇满分作文，写的是失败到成功的故事，大家可以参考。

　　This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch the movie in order to prepare. For two hours I studied Elizabeth Taylors mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.

　　I auditioned for the part of Maggie feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor, however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didnt get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see Maggie from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylors.

　　I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress, in order to create my character.

　　Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simons Rumors, and would get the opportunity to play Chris, a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my character, I planned out her life just as I thought it should be, gave her the voice I thought was right, and the rest of her character unfolded beautifully from there.

　　My director told me after the first show that Rumors was the best work hed ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how Id developed such a believable character.

　　实战演练：接下来我们来做一个工作，就着这个素材来写5月的题目。Do people succeed by emphasizing their difference from others?

　　大家从题目里面找到两个重点，一个是不同，一个是成功，需要用细节去细化。接下来围绕这两个点，结合例子素材，整出例子的思路链条。

　　例子思路：背景为了成功，看Taylor 的演出，为了做到和她一模一样失败安排导演宣布失败理由痛定思痛准备下一次演出强调自己的个性，按照自己的方式给出这个觉得的声音包括表演方式成功

　　修改版：

　　This past year, I was auditioning for the fall play, Cat on a Hot Tin Roof. To my detriment I thought it would be a good idea to watch a relevant movie starred by Elizabeth Taylor in order to prepare. For two hours I studied her mannerisms, attitude, and diction, hoping I could mimic her performance.

　　I auditioned for the part of Maggie feeling perfectly confident in my portrayal of Elizabeth Taylor; however, I was unaware that my director saw exactly what I had been thinking. Unfortunately, I didnt get the part, and my director told me that he needed to see Maggie from my perspective, not Elizabeth Taylors.

　　I learned from this experience, and promised myself I would not try to imitate another actress. Instead, it is imperative to find out my difference, namely, my unique way of acting, in playing a new role.

　　Persevering, I was anxious to audition for the winter play just two months later. The play was Neil Simons Rumors, and would get the opportunity to play Chris, a sarcastic yet witty role, which would be my final performance in high school. In order to develop my own character, I placed emphasis on originality, planning out her life just as I thought it should be, giving her the voice I thought was right; naturally, the rest of her character was unfolded beautifully from there.

　　Then I went for another try. After the first show my director told me that Rumors was the best work hed ever seen from me, and that he was amazed at how Id developed such a believable and different character.