GRE AWA MODEL ESSAYS ——Issue 9

　　Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, they in fact,prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.

　　Do modern luxuries serve to undermine our true strenghth and indepedence as individuals? The speaker believes so ,and i tend to agree.Consider the automobile,for example .Most people consider the automobile a necessarity rather than a luxury;yet it is for this very reason that the automobile so aptly supports the speakers point.To the extent that we depend on cars as crutches,they prevent us from becoming truly independent and strong in character as individuals.

　　Consider first the effect of the automobile on our independence as individuals.In some respects the automobiles serves to enhances such independence .For example,cars make it possible for people in isolated and depressed areas without public transportation to become more independent by pursing gainful employment outside their communities.And teenagers discover that owning a car,or even borrowing one on occasion,affords them a needed sense of independence from their parents.

　　However,cars have diminished our independence in a number of more significant respects.Weve grown dependent on our cars for commuting to work .We rely on them like crutches for short trips to the corner store, and for carting our children to and from school.Moreover,the car has become a means not only to our assorted physical destinations but also to the attainment of our socioeconomic golas,insofar as the automobile has becoming a symbol of status.In fact ,in my observation many,if not most, working professionals willingly undermine their financial security for the sake of being seen driving this years new SUV might afford a person a feeling and appearance of strength ,or machismo.But this feeling has nothing to do with a persons true character.

　　In contrast,there is a certain strength of character that comes with eschewing modern conviences such as cars,and with the knowledge that one is contributing to a cleaner and quieter environment,a safer neighborhood,and arguably a more genteel society.Also ,alternative modes of transportation such as bicycling and walking are forms of exercise which require and promote the virtue of self-discipline.Finally ,in my observation people who have forsaken the automobile spend more time at home,where they are more inclined to prepare and even grow their own food ,and to spend more time with their families.The former enhances ones independence; the latter enhances the integrity of ones values and the strength of ones family.

　　In sum up ,the automobile helps illustrate that when a luxury becomes a necessity it can sap our independence and strength as individuals.Perhaps our society is better off , on balance,with such luxuries after all, the automobile industry has created countless jobs,raised our standard of living ,and made the world more interesting .However ,by becoming slaves to the automobile we trade off a certain independence and inner strength