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well,(well为口语表达,书面表达中不可用) as everyone knows, twilight is a very popular best selling novel indeed, and has been on sceen recently, i watched the movie with my friends suggest, and fell in love with the beautiful story, M
many of us may wonder, can hardship be beautiful? cause most of us think that its the most painful and awful moment of our life that we wont even bare to think of it, well, its all the same with me before.well, after watch the movie and the novel itself, i felt much encouraged, you know, its some times useful and worthy to dig deeper of the story.the love and the happy ending is grateful indeed, but have you ever thought of the hardship they both had before they got the happy ending they deserved?
yes, can you imagine the quarrels of three different kinds:the wolfs,human,and vampire?thats what bella faced, and edward, he suffered his life for bella, and is brave enough to face enemy both in his own spiece and the wolf--jacob.
but as a reader, we enjoyed all their hardships, frustrations and their misunderstanding of each other, why? because there would be no stories and no touchable moments in this book and it wont be eye catching.
so, as for ourself, why cant we face our hardship more confidently, cause after all, i believe in a saying:humans are forgettable creatures, but hardships can never be forgotten.
部分词汇存在堆砌之感,因为词是好词,但是用法不恰当,在以后的学习中,要注意词的活学活用。
建议修改:
As everyone knows, twilight is indeed a very popular bestselling novel and has been on screen recently. Following my friends suggestion, I watched the movie and fell in love with the beautiful story. In it, I saw the beauty of the hardship.
Many of us may wonder, can hardship be beautiful? Perhaps most of us consider that hardship is such a painful and awful moment in life that we wont even bare to think of it. Honestly speaking, I hold the same thought before. However, after watching the movie and the novel itself, I felf much encouraged. In my view, sometimes, its useful andvaluable to dig deeper of the story. The love and happy ending is romantic indeed, while have you ever thought of the hardship they both have conquered before they got to the wonderful ending?
Then, can you imagine the quarrels of the three different kinds: the wolves, the man, and the vampire? Thats what Bella faced. Edward, on the other hand,suffered from his life for Bella, and was brave enough to face enemy both from his own spiece and the wolf---Jocob.
But as a reader, I enjoyed all their hardships, frustrations, and their misunderstanding towards each other. Why? The answer is no romance without hardship.
So why cant we face our hardships more confidently and bravely? After all, I believe in a saying: humans are forgettable creatures, but hardships can never be forgotten.
批改老师:张淑娟
张淑娟(查看张淑娟老师介绍), 在教学中,张老师静则一丝不苟、严肃认真、有条不紊地向学生灌输完备的知识体系,动则激情四溢,用夸张和幽默的动作或语言形式向学生展示英语的魅力和英语 学习的趣味。总之张老师以调动学生对英语学习的积极性为基础,用心培养学生对英语的兴趣,因材施教地开发学生的 智 的同时也注重对学生的 德、体、美、劳的教育。
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