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I am very pleased to attend this English competition. Although I have prepared a lot, but I still feel a little nervous, because there are so many excellent opponents. You know there is always someone better.
I know everyone have advantage and everyone is unique. So, I can learn a lot from them in many aspects, such as speaking, pronunciation and other things.
This challenging competition arouses my passion to study hard and to make progress. At the same time, I will also find some aspects to be improved.
Although all attendees are opponents, we are also friends. We help each other.
No matter I win or loss, I will thank you, my opponents.
I am very pleased to attend this English competition. Although I have prepared a lot, but（删掉） I still feel a little nervous, because there are so many excellent opponents. You know there is always someone better.
I know everyonehas advantage and everyone is unique. So, I can learn a lot from them in many aspects, such as speaking, pronunciation and other things.
This challenging competition arouses my passion to study hard and to make progress. At the same time, I will also find some aspectsto be improved.
Although all attendees are opponents, we are also friends. We help each other.
No matter I win or loss, I will thank you, my opponents.
1. 分段明确，
2. 内容较充实，但是缺少具体例子，如对手哪句话激励了自己等。
3. 逻辑词使用恰当。
4. 语法规范，基本没有错误。
5. 高级词汇及短语使用很多，句型多样，表达流畅。
总：是一篇佳作，但如果能够让内容更充实一些会更优秀：）
批改老师：王允泽
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