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Tiger is in danger

发布时间：2016-02-29 编辑：查字典英语网小编

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Earth is in trouble. Some animals and plants are now disappearing. S , such as tigers.

However Today, however, the tigers are becoming die dyingout, because people are killing them. Animals are our friends,so we can mustprotect them.We do not need to do big things something big--we can say to just tell people Dont killing tiger. If people can do this,I think the animals will live better.

Thia is ourEarth.Lets do our best to make it more beautiful.

本文对保护老虎发表了自己的看法，立意较好。结构上基本符合总-分-总的形式，套路是正确的。以Earth is in trouble.开篇，简洁有力，让人眼前一亮。只是中间的内容显得不够充实，并希望注意表达更地道一些。

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