如何写出英语作文得分的“亮点”1

1。 改变句子的开头方式，不是一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首，或用分词作状语等。试比较:

1. To change the way a sentence begins, it is not always the beginning of the subject, then the predicate, the object, and finally an adverbial. You can put adverbials at the beginning of a sentence, or use participles as adverbials. Compare:

(原文) My brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle the other day。

My brother and I went to the cinema by cycle the other day.

(修正) The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by bicycle。

The other day my brother and I went to the cinema by cycle.

(原文) The young man couldn’t help crying when he heard the bad news。

T he young man could't help crying when he heard the bad news.

(修正) Hearing the bad news， the young man couldn’t help crying。

(Amendment) hearing the bad news, the young man could't help crying.

2。 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如强调句、主从复合句、分词短语、倒装句、省略句等。例如:

2. In the whole article, we should avoid using only one or two sentence patterns, and use them flexibly, such as emphasis sentence, subject-subordinate compound sentence, participle phrase, inversion sentence, ellipsis sentence, etc. For example:

(1)强调句

(1) emphatic sentences

(原文) The dog has saved my little sister bravely。

The dog has saved my little sister bravery.

(修正) It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravely。

It is the dog that has saved my little sister bravery.

(2)主从复合句

(2) Subject subordinate compound sentence

(原文) We had to stand there to catch the offender。

We had to stand there to catch the offer.

(修正) What we had to do was to stand there， trying to catch the offender。

What we had to do was to stand there, trying to catch the offer.

(3)分词短语、由with或without引导的短语

(3) Participle phrase, phrase guided by with or without

(原文) The driver escaped and didn’t stop， he left the old man lying on the road。

T he driver escaped and didn't stop, he left the old man lying on the road.

(修正) The driver escaped without stopping， leaving the old man lying on the road。

The driver escaped without stopping, leaving the old man lying on the road.

(4)倒装句

(4) inverted sentences

(原文) I went to bed at 11:30。

I went to be at 11:30.

(修正) Not until 11:30 did I go to bed。

(Amendment) not until 11:30 did I go to bed.

(5)省略句

(5) ellipsis

(原文) While you are crossing the street， you should be careful。

While you are crossing the street, you should be careful.

(修正) While crossing the street， you should be careful。

While crossing the street, you should be careful.