舞动科技与知识的羽翼齐飞

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阅读下面的文字，根据要求写一篇不少于800字的文章。(60分)

Read the following text and write an article of no less than 800 words as required. (60 points)

据有关部门调查，六年来我国国民图书阅读率持续走低：1999年为60。4%，2001年为54。2%，2003年为51。7%，而2005年为48。7%，首次低于50%。造成图书阅读率持续走低的原因是多方面的。识字的人为什么不读书？中年人多数说“没时间”，青年人多数说“不习惯”，还有人说“买不起”、“没地方借”。

According to the survey of relevant departments, the reading rate of national books in China has been declining for six years: 60 in 1999. 4%, compared with 54 in 2001. 2%, compared with 51 in 2003. 7%, compared with 48 in 2005. 7%, less than 50% for the first time. There are many reasons for the low reading rate of books. Why don't literate people read? Most middle-aged people say "no time", most young people say "not used to", others say "can't afford", "no place to borrow".

与图书阅读率走低相反，网上阅读率正在迅速增长：1999年为3。7%，2003年为18。3%，2005年为27。8%。

Contrary to the low reading rate of books, the online reading rate is growing rapidly: 3 in 1999. 7%, compared with 18 in 2003. 3%, compared with 27 in 2005. 8%.

要求全面理解材料，但可以选择一个侧面、一个角度构思作文。自主确定立意，确定文体，确定标题；不要脱离材料内容及其含意作文，不要套作，不得抄袭。

It requires a comprehensive understanding of the material, but you can choose one side and one angle to conceive the composition. Independent determination of intention, style and title; do not deviate from the content of the material and the meaning of the composition, do not copy, do not copy.

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2006年全国卷Ⅱ的作文不是以往的话题作文，也不是原来的材料作文，而是介于材料与话题之间的作文，笔者把这种作文形式叫做“命意作文”。这种作文形式与2005年湖北卷作文相似。所谓命意作文，就是给定材料，不给定话题，要求既不像材料作文那样“过死”，也不像话题作文那样“过宽”。这种命意作文相对于材料作文与话题作文来说，属于新生事物，其生命力是强大的，从形式上讲，材料给考生提供了构思的蓝本，“要求”给考生规定了构思的范围，免得考生思维无章法，成文太随意。

The composition of 2006 National Volume II is not the former topic composition, nor the original material composition, but the composition between the material and the topic. The author calls this composition form "Life Meaning Composition". This kind of composition is similar to that of Hubei volume in 2005. The so-called destiny composition is to give materials and no topic, and it requires neither "too much death" nor "too much width" as material composition. Compared with material composition and topic composition, this kind of destiny composition belongs to a new thing, and its vitality is strong. In terms of form, materials provide candidates with blueprint of ideas, and "requirements" provide candidates with scope of ideas, so as to avoid candidates' disordered thinking and arbitrary writing.

面对这样的命意作文，我们在作文时关键是准确审题、恰当立意。材料作文审题太难，话题作文“不需审题”，命意作文要慎重审题。因袭话题作文“不需审题”的错误思想，在看到命意作文的时候，千万不要把其当成话题作文来作文，不要认为“命意作文也是个筐，什么都可以往里装”。如何审题呢？首先，审材料。材料是触发我们写作的第一要素，材料是激活我们作文思维的催化剂。比如，我们在阅读本材料的时候，一定会知道这是关于阅读方面的材料，那文章的立意就可以确定为“阅读”；其次，审要求。 “要求全面理解材料，但可以选择一个侧面、一个角度构思作文。自主确定立意，确定文体，确定标题；不要脱离材料内容及其含意作文，不要套作，不得抄袭”是今年作文的要求。“全面理解材料，但可以选择一个侧面、一个角度构思作文”是明确作文的构思方向；“自主确定立意，确定文体，确定标题”是作文的“三确定”原则；“ 不要脱离材料内容及其含意作文，不要套作，不得抄袭”是作文的“三不”方针。其中作文的构思方向是我们审题的焦点，也是我们立意的切入点。“全面理解材料”意味着考生要对本材料作一个全面的理解，这个内容应该是“图书阅读率与网上阅读率”的问题，核心是“阅读”的问题，因此，我们可以以此立意，阅读是什么？怎样阅读？阅读的结果会怎样？“可以选择一个侧面、一个角度构思成文”意味着让考生可以选取材料中的任何一个片断，如图书阅读率或网上阅读率等，这样可以有下面的立意：读书心得，网络阅读之利弊等等。这时，我们还有一个关键点不要忽略――不要脱离材料内容及其含意作文，这是一种较之话题作文要严格的一种限制，脱离了这个限制来谈任何问题都是离题的。如我们由本材料不可以谈人们观念的变化，单纯地谈科技如何迅速发展等问题。

In the face of such a fate composition, the key to our composition is to examine the topic accurately and make a proper intention. Material composition is too difficult to examine, topic composition "does not need to examine", meaning composition should be carefully examined. Following the wrong idea of "no need to examine the topic" in topic composition, when you see destiny composition, do not regard it as topic composition, do not think "destiny composition is also a basket, anything can be loaded inside". How to examine the questions? First, review the materials. Material is the first factor to trigger our writing, and material is the catalyst to activate our writing thinking. For example, when we read this material, we will surely know that it is about reading, and the intention of the article can be determined as "reading"; secondly, the examination requirements. "It requires a comprehensive understanding of the material, but you can choose one side and one angle to conceive the composition. It is the requirement of this year's composition that we should determine the intention, style and title independently, not separate from the content and meaning of the material, not copy or copy. "Comprehensive understanding of the materials, but you can choose one side and one angle to conceive the composition" is to clear the direction of the composition; "independent determination of intention, style and title" is the principle of "three determinations" of the composition; "do not separate from the content of the materials and the meaning of the composition, do not copy, do not copy" is the principle of "three no" of the composition. The direction of composition is the focus of our examination and the starting point of our intention. "Comprehensive understanding of materials" means that the examinee should have a comprehensive understanding of this material. This content should be the problem of "book reading rate and online reading rate", and the core is the problem of "reading". Therefore, we can take this idea, what is reading? How to read? What will be the result of reading? "Can choose a side, an angle to conceive writing" means that candidates can choose any piece of material, such as book reading rate or online reading rate, etc., which can have the following ideas: reading experience, advantages and disadvantages of online reading, etc. At this time, we still have a key point not to ignore -- do not separate from the material content and the meaning of the composition, which is a more strict limitation than the topic composition. It is off topic to talk about any problem without this limitation. For example, we can not talk about the change of people's ideas from this material, but simply talk about the rapid development of science and technology.

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舞动科技与知识的羽翼齐飞

Dancing the wings of technology and knowledge

培根说，知识就是力量。

Bacon said that knowledge is power.

知识如同鸟儿一样，寻找着一片适合自己的林地；知识如同花儿一样，寻觅着一方绽放的沃土；知识如同鱼儿一样，巡游着一坛(潭)栖息的水塘。

Knowledge is like a bird, looking for a suitable forest land; knowledge is like a flower, looking for a blooming fertile soil; knowledge is like a fish, patrolling a pond (pond) inhabiting.

我们需要知识，同时更需要找到一条获取知识的途经(径)。以前，我们大都到各种各样的

We need knowledge, but also need to find a way to acquire knowledge. Before, most of us went to all kinds of

电脑是一种新的科技产品，从诞生的第一天起，它就以惊人的速度发展着。如今，人们使用电脑不仅玩游戏，聊天，还能进行查资料，阅读。这种方便快捷的阅读形式很快被一些人接受，人们通过因特网了解到很多知识，是它使国民阅读率走低。为此，我做了一个调查，比较一下图书馆与网上阅读的优缺点：

Computer is a kind of new technology product. From the first day of its birth, it has developed at an amazing speed. Nowadays, people use computers not only to play games and chat, but also to check information and read. This kind of convenient and quick reading form is quickly accepted by some people. People know a lot of knowledge through the Internet, which makes the national reading rate low. For this reason, I have made a survey to compare the advantages and disadvantages of Library and online reading

首先，我问了一个中年人，“您好，问您一个问题，您对现在的网上阅读有什么看法？”“网上阅读，速度快，方便便捷，但是，我比较讨厌网上阅读，一是阅读时心不净(静)，二是网上材料太花哨。”这个中年人回答道。

First of all, I asked a middle-aged man, "Hello, I'd like to ask you a question. What's your opinion on online reading now?" "Online reading is fast, convenient and convenient. However, I hate online reading. One is that my mind is not clean (quiet) while reading. The other is that online materials are too fancy." The middle-aged man replied.

我问了一个青年人，“你在阅读的时候，是经常到图书馆，还是到网上？”“图书馆也去，网上也浏览。但上网阅读的时间比图书馆要多。”“为什么你喜欢上网阅读呢？”“痛快，随便，自由！”青年人拖(脱)口答道。

I asked a young man, "when you are reading, do you often go to the library or to the Internet?" "The library is there, and the Internet is there. But it takes more time to read online than in the library. " "Why do you like reading online?" "Happy, free, free!" Replied the young man, dragging (taking off).

我走到一位老者面前，“请问，您喜欢网上阅读吗？”“说不上喜欢，但也不反对。像我们这样的人，上网眼睛跟不上，还是读一读书吧，慢慢来还是好！”

I went to an old man and said, "excuse me, do you like reading online?" "I don't like it, but I'm not against it. People like us can't keep up with their eyes on the Internet, so it's better to read a book and take it slow! "

一系列的调查结果表明：对于网上阅读好还是不好，人们都各值(执)一词。但我认为，网络毕竟是一种科技的产物，它能帮助我们更快更便捷地获取知识。

A series of survey results show that: for online reading is good or bad, people all value (hold) the word. But I think, after all, the Internet is a product of technology, which can help us acquire knowledge faster and more easily.

新世纪的发展，新科技的腾飞，带给我们的是超越，是希望，同时更是与时俱进的创新。

The development of the new century and the rapid development of new technology bring us transcendence, hope and innovation with the times.

让我们舞动科技与知识的羽翼齐飞吧！

Let's fly with the wings of technology and knowledge!

[误区警示] 本文紧扣材料，由材料的含意来确定立意，“舞动科技与知识的羽翼齐飞”这个立意较深刻，结构较严谨，语言富有鼓动性。因此，在初评时，我们给了45分。但仔细分析，文章存在很多问题，主要表现在两个方面：一是论证的中心不集中。如在阐述知识与科技这个问题时，大量的调查，笔者认为没有必要，完全可以以例子的形式来呈现，这样才能使得文章的结构更紧凑，论证更集中。二是语言基本功不扎实，病句、错别字影响了阅卷老师对文章的整体评判。怎样把这篇二类文章升格呢？笔者认为：

[warning of misunderstanding] this paper is closely related to the material, and determines the idea by the meaning of the material. The idea of "dancing technology and knowledge fly together" is profound, with a rigorous structure and an inspiring language. So, in the initial evaluation, we gave 45 points. However, after careful analysis, there are many problems in this paper, which are mainly manifested in two aspects: first, the center of argument is not concentrated. For example, in the elaboration of knowledge and technology, a large number of investigations, I think it is unnecessary, can be presented in the form of examples, so as to make the structure of the article more compact, more concentrated argument. Second, the basic language skills are not solid, the sick sentences and wrong words affect the overall evaluation of the paper. How to upgrade this second class article? The author believes that:

1。夯实基础。首先，夯实字词句基础，在行文的时候，尽量避免甚至杜绝错别字和病句的产生。其次，夯实语言表达的基础。对同一事物，要善于运用不同的语言来表达，使之富于变化。

1. Consolidate the foundation. First of all, lay a solid foundation for words and sentences. When writing, try to avoid or even put an end to the generation of wrong words and sentences. Secondly, lay a solid foundation for language expression. We should be good at using different languages to express the same thing and make it rich in variety.

2。强化立意。所谓强化立意，就是要深刻挖掘作文要求，从作文要求所渗透出的信息，立“高、新 、深、远”的意，这是中档作文提升的最好办法，可以采用发散思维、集合思维、逆向思维等思维方式，可以采用“是什么，为什么，怎么样”的审题模式，来确定立意。

2. Strengthen the purpose. The so-called strengthening of intention is to deeply tap the composition requirements, establish the "high, new, deep and far" meaning from the information permeated by the composition requirements, which is the best way to improve the mid-range composition. We can adopt divergent thinking, collective thinking, reverse thinking and other thinking modes, and we can adopt the "what, why, how" examination mode to determine the intention.

3。学会模仿和借鉴。模仿成功作文，不管是自己的还是别人的，只要是成功的，我们都可以模仿。

3. Learn to imitate and learn from. We can imitate a successful composition, whether it is our own or someone else's, as long as it is successful.