Ladies and gentlemen,
Welcome to our school !
① This village is a small one with/which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people.
It used to be very poor. ② However, it has changed a lot since 1978 People here ③ live a much better life than before .
Now it is taking on a new look. Ladies and gentlemen,
Welcome to our school! ① This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor.
② It has changed a lot since 1978 People here ③ are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look. 书面表达：
⑤ In the past, the school here was very small. Now it has been rebuilt. ⑥ The newly built teaching building has 4 storeys. It is the most beautiful building in the village. ⑦ All the school-age children can study here. They enjoy free education in it.
Thank you.
⑤ In the past, the school here was very small
but now
it has been rebuilt
⑦ All the school-age children can study here. What’s more, they enjoy free education.. ⑥ the newly built teaching building which has 4 storeys is the most beautiful one in the village.
Thank you.
How to improve your writing? 1.Avoid the mistakes we often make
2.Use complex sentences 3.Use different sentence structures 4.Use proper transitional words 5.Use advanced words Rome is not built in one day. Practice makes perfect! 返回 Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
Last night I went to bed at 12 o’clock. Last night I didn’t go to bed until 12 o’clock. Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
I woke up at 9 o’clock this morning. When I woke up this morning, it was already 9 o’clock. When already it When it already get to… realize Sunday the school gate I realized it was Sunday today . It was then that I realized it was Sunday today. 3) 他的右眼瞎了。
a. Her right eye is blind.
4) 他健壮如牛。
a. He is strong like a cow.
5)
汤姆的父亲打了他一个耳光。
a. Tom’s father beat him in his face.
b. She is blind in the right eye.
b. He is strong like a horse (as strong as a horse). b. Tom’s father beat him in the face.
4. 书写必须工整,确保不犯拼写错误 (Avoiding mistakes)。 parents & peasant & present
sun & son
attack & attract
blood & flood
flood & floor ...... 4. 书写必须工整,确保不犯拼写错误
(Avoid spelling mistakes) parents & peasant & present
sun & son
attack & attract
blood & flood
flood & floor ...... 三 “张冠李戴”型
1.误用主语
Don’t worry .Your body will get well.
(把 Your body 改为 You)
2.误用谓语
The time past quickly
. ( past
改为
passed )
3.误用宾语
I was so pleased to hear from your letter .( your letter
改为 you 或把
hear from改为
receive ) 四 “乱点鸳鸯”型
1. Our school has taken place great changes in the past three years. （ 改为 Great changes have taken place in our school in the past three years ) 2. Go on please , I am hearing you .
( hearing
改为 listening to )
3. My dream has become true. ( become 改为 come)
The common transitional words and phrases are as follows 表并列：
and/both… and/not only …but also/neither…nor/as well
表选择：
or/either… or 表转折：
but/although/however/otherwise/after all 表举例或例证：for example/for instance/such as/take…forexample/ namely/
表强调：
also/besides/in fact/actually/of course/ 表时间或顺序：first (firstly)/ second (secondly) /third/(thirdly) /next /later/soon after/since then/at last/finally 表因果关系：
because/as/for this reason/because of/therefore/so/as a result of 表对比或比较：like/unlike/while/still/compared with/instead/on the contrary/on the other hand 表示结论或摘要：in a word/in one word/in short/generally
speaking/that is to say/as a result/as far as we know
* 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句型，要灵活运用各种语法结构，运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉 。 * What happened first?(what’s the logical order) What happened second?
What happened last?
Which conjunction you would use * 大家看，这篇书面表达要点齐全，表达正确，但语言平淡，表达方式单一，逻辑性差，它很难在考试的评分中得到较高档次。如果我们能使用一些恰当的连接词，尽量使用较高级、较复杂的语法结构，就使这个平淡的文章有很大改观，甚至会变得更精彩。 ①用介词短语作定语或用含定语从句的主从复合句。 ②语句间缺少连接成分。 ③表现作者对现在乡村的发展的喜悦心情，也起到承上启下作用。 ④较高级词汇。 * ⑤作者对过去孩子们上不起学表示遗憾和同情。 ⑥语句间缺少连接成分。⑦语句间缺少连接成分。 ⑧用含定语从句的主从复合句。 ⑨应在此处添加一承接上下文的过渡性词语，如“What’s more/Also”，这样，前后就显得更加连贯了。⑩如能适当发挥，在结尾处添加像“…”的表希望、祝愿的语句，适当增加句子的感情色彩，增加一些人情味，会使全文更加完整，使文章读起来更亲切，完全达到与读者进行交流的目的，从而收到更佳的表达效果。
* That is all,thank you! 高三英语chai 抄 改 连 扩 抓 审 书面 表达 书面表达六步法 一 “缺胳膊少腿”型
1.But
was
already 4 o’clock. 3.He seated
on the grass.
4.Besides, I’m easy to get along
, and enjoy working with others.
it 2.However, other students against the idea. are himself with 二 “画蛇填足”型
1. He returned back home yesterday . 2. But
there are 60% of the students are against the idea . 3. We must study hard to serve for the people heart and soul.
1. The price of my car is very expensive .
2. China has a
more
population than Japan.
3. The thief ran away to the direction of the coast. 三 “张冠李戴”型
high larger in 四 “Chinglish”型
3) 他的右眼瞎了。 1) 高考 high exam ? college entrance examination 2) 父母对我们期望很高。 The hope of our parents is very high.
Our parents expect too much of us. His right eye is blind. He is blind in the right eye. 五 “瞻前不顾后”型
1．Although he was very tired, but he went on working in the office.
2. On one hand, 60% of the students are against the idea , but 40% of the students think it is reasonable. Although but on the other hand The little girl knows so many things . It
surprises him. What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.
The little girl
knows
so many
things , which surprises him.
The little
girl knows
so many things
that
it surprises him. That the little girl knows so many things surprises him. (-ing form , to , p.p , attributive clause , inversion , with…) Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
I often stay up late.
I often stay up late to go over my lessons for the college entrance examinations.
I go over my lessons for the college entrance examinations.
to 1. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式)
2. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分词)
3. I met one of my old friends in the street yesterday.(使用强调句型)
4. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气） Use different sentence structures
I couldn’t have passed the physics exam but for your help.
Singing and laughing, they went back to school. Followed by many students, she walked out of the lab. It was in the street that I met one of my old friends yesterday. 5.If you study hard, you will make rapid progress. （用并列句）
6．He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent
abroad. (使用倒装句) No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. Study hard and you’ll make rapid progress. 逻辑角度
合适的过渡性词汇 时间顺序
空间顺序 对称顺序 转折顺序 因果顺序 条件顺序 让步顺序 递进顺序 过渡性插入语 first, second, then, finally/at last , soon immediately, suddenly here, there, on one side…on the other side, in front of, at the back of, next to for one thing, for
another thing; on one hand,on the other hand but, however, while, though, otherwise because, since, as, thanks to, as a result (of) as long as, so long as, on condition that, if, unless though, as, even if/though, whether, who (what,when, where)ever what’s more,
besides,
to make matters worse, what’s worse I think, I’m afraid, you know, As we all know May 25, Sunday
Cloudy This morning I went to the shop to change the coat I bought yesterday. The salesgirl treated me coldly. She didn’t admit the coat was sold in her shop. She said that I made it dirty. She gave various excuses to refuse my request. I quarreled with her. The manager turned up. He asked what was the matter. He knew all about this, he apologized to me and criticized (批评) the salesgirl. They changed another coat for me. I said goodbye to them and took it home happily.
May 25, Sunday
Cloudy
This morning I went to the shop to change the coat I bought yesterday. ___________The salesgirl treated me coldly. ______________She didn’t admit the coat was sold in her shop. __________She said that I made it dirty. ______________She gave various excuses to refuse my request.
I got so angry that
I quarreled with her. ___________________The manager turned up. He asked what was the matter. ___________________________He knew all about this, he apologized to me and criticized (批评) the salesgirl. They changed another coat for me. I said goodbye to them and took it home happily. However At the beginning Later In a word After that/ As soon as/ The moment Just at that moment 1. Our classmates were both surprised and very happy when they saw the wall newspaper.
Our classmates
were
both
surprised
and
overjoyed when they saw the wall newspaper. 2. I used to have to do a lot of homework even at weekends.
I used to have to do endless homework even at weekends. 3. He didn’t listen to what I said in the classroom.
He turned a deaf ear to what I said in the classroom 看图作文举例 Picture 1 go over… nine o’clock stay up wake up
Picture 2 get dressed rush into…
get my schoolbag
prepare
breakfast Picture 3 ran out get on my bike ride to school
as fast as… Picture 4 get to… to my surprise close
realize Sunday find the school gate Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
I often stay up late.
I often stay up late to go over my lessons for the college entrance examinations.
I go over my lessons for the college entrance examinations.
to Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
I woke up at 9 o’clock this morning. When I woke up this morning, it was already 9 o’clock. When already it When it already Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
I rushed into the living – room. I rushed into the living – room, where Mother was preparing breakfast.
where Mother was preparing breakfast in the living – room.
the living – room the living – room the living – room Before she could say anything, I got my schoolbag, ran out and got on my bike. Mother couldn’t say anything. I got my schoolbag.
I ran out. I got on my bike. 1
4
2
3
Some effective sentences of the possible version as examples.
I realized it was Sunday today . It was then that I realized it was Sunday today. Possible version:
June 17, Sunday I often stay up late to go over my lessons for the college entrance examinations.
Last night I didn’t go to bed until 12 o’clock. When I woke up this morning, it was already 9 o’clock. I got dressed and washed myself quickly. Then I rushed into the living – room, where Mother was preparing breakfast. Before she could say anything, I got my schoolbag, ran out and got on my bike. I rode as fast as I could. It seemed only a few minutes before I got to the school gate. To my surprise, it was closed. It was then that I realized it was Sunday today.
* 在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句型，要灵活运用各种语法结构，运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少，从而使整篇文章因此而生辉 。 * What happened first?(what’s the logical order) What happened second?
What happened last?
Which conjunction you would use * 大家看，这篇书面表达要点齐全，表达正确，但语言平淡，表达方式单一，逻辑性差，它很难在考试的评分中得到较高档次。如果我们能使用一些恰当的连接词，尽量使用较高级、较复杂的语法结构，就使这个平淡的文章有很大改观，甚至会变得更精彩。 ①用介词短语作定语或用含定语从句的主从复合句。 ②语句间缺少连接成分。 ③表现作者对现在乡村的发展的喜悦心情，也起到承上启下作用。 ④较高级词汇。 * ⑤作者对过去孩子们上不起学表示遗憾和同情。 ⑥语句间缺少连接成分。⑦语句间缺少连接成分。 ⑧用含定语从句的主从复合句。 ⑨应在此处添加一承接上下文的过渡性词语，如“What’s more/Also”，这样，前后就显得更加连贯了。⑩如能适当发挥，在结尾处添加像“…”的表希望、祝愿的语句，适当增加句子的感情色彩，增加一些人情味，会使全文更加完整，使文章读起来更亲切，完全达到与读者进行交流的目的，从而收到更佳的表达效果。
* That is all,thank you!