揭阳市2014高考英语短文改错、书面表达一轮训练（4）附参考范文
(201*·内江、广安模拟)
Last Saturday we had a party at home. Dad's friends come1.________
along with their families. Since Mom was not at home, Dad
2.________
and I had to prepare everything, so it turned out such a miracle
3.________
that they did make it! Everything went perfectly fine.
4.________
A lot of kids who came that day. I had the most wonderful time
5.________
with Steven. It was just amazed to find someone so much
6.________
like me. We had a lot of things by common. The time seemed
7.________
short to me, and I wished we could have had some more time
8.________
to continue the conversation. Hopeful we're going on
9.________
a trip together next summer, and also summer after next
.10.________
答案与解析：
1．come→came 整篇文章为一般过去时，应把come改为came。
2．√
3．so→but 前后语境为转折关系，应把so改为but。
4．they→we 根据上文可知作者使用了第一人称，此处指作者和父亲俩人，因此应把they改为we。
5．去掉who 本句为简单句，去掉who。
6．amazed→amazing 主语为it，应用amazing作表语，表示“令人惊异的”。
7．by→in 固定短语have...in common表示“有……相同之处”。
8．去掉had wish后的宾语从句用虚拟语气，谓语应用情态动词＋动词原形，因此把had去掉。
9．Hopeful→Hopefully 副词hopefully放在句首，表示“希望”副词作状语修饰整个句子。
10．在also后加the next summer指明年夏天，the summer after next指后年夏天。
1． 议论文是以议论为主要表达方式的一种文体，它通过摆事实，讲道理的方式来辩明是非曲折，从而表达出作者的观点。它常由论点，论据和论证三部分构成。
2． 在近几年的高考书面表达中，其主要命题形式是以表格式和提纲式来呈现写作材料的。
3． 它要求语言必须简练，准确，要尽可能避免使用口语，多用书面语，可适当使用名言警句；以议论为主，辅之以叙述，说明和描写等手法。
4． 写作时要围绕中心论点展开议论，即论据和论证要围绕论点展开。根据题目要求，有时需要从正反两面来论述，可增强论证的力度。最后，可得出结论，照应开头，形成一个有机的整体。
5． 写作时常以三段式的形式展开议论。
写作典例：
暑假即将来临，你班同学就假期计划进行讨论，提出了不同看法，请根据提示写一篇英语短文，并谈谈你的看法。
优点 缺点
呆在家中 花费少，舒适方便 不能亲自了解外界
外出旅游 增长知识，开阔眼界 花费多，旅途不便
注意：1。词数120左右（不含已写好部分）
2．短文必须包括表中所列要点，可根据内容分段表述；
3．可适当增加细节以使行文连贯；
4．参考词汇：眼界horizon(view)
案例分析
这是一篇典型的议论文体的写作，它以表格的形式提出了论点（呆在家中的优点和缺点以及外出旅游的优点和缺点）和论据，还以文字提示形式提出了话题（假期计划）及需要考生自由发挥的部分（你的看法），自己的看法可选择上述中的任何一种，并就此发表个人的见解。本文的重点是表格中两种方式的优，缺点，根据题目的特点，以三段式的形式来写作比较好。
根据内容，尽管讨论已经发生，但它是就一般的暑假假期计划而进行的讨论，没有特定的时间界定，因而考生应以一般现在时和一般将来时为主。相当一部分考生用一般过去时进行论述，这会失掉较多的分数。从题目所给的开头可知应用第一人称来写。
范文：
The summer holiday is coming. Our class have a discussion about what to do during the holiday.
Some are in favor of staying at home. They think it's both convenient and comfortable. What's more, they can save money for other purposes. But they will lose the chance of getting to know the outside world. However, others prefer to go out for traveling since it can increase their knowledge and broaden their horizons. But they will spend more money and meet some difficulties while traveling.
In my opinion, it would be much better to stay at home, for I can do what I like, such as reading books, watching TV, and helping my parents with the housework.
针对练习
1．2002年普通高等学校招生全国英语统一考试书面表达试题
最近，你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一场讨论。讨论的主题是：公园要不要收门票？请你根据下表提供的信息，给报社写一封信，客观地介绍讨论情况。
60%的同学认为 40%的同学认为
1、不应收门票
2、公园是公众休闲的地方
3、如收票，需建大门、围墙，会影响城市形象 1、应收门票，但票价不宜高
2、支付园林工人工资
3、购新花木
注意：
1、信的开头已为你写好。 2、词数：100左右。 3、参考词汇：门票：entrance fee
One possible version:
Dear Editor,
I'm writing to tell you about the discussion we've had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for parks.
Opinions are divided on the question. 60% of the students are against the idea of entrance fees. They believed a public park should be free of charge. People need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Charging entrance fees will no doubt keep some people away. What is more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city.
On the other hand, 40% think that fees should be charged because you need money to pay gardeners and other workers and to buy plants and young trees. They suggest, however, fees should be charged low.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
2．当前不少文学作品被改编成电影。有人选择看电影，有人则喜欢读原著。请你以“Film or book, which do you prefer?”为题，按照下列要点写一篇英语短文：
1、 看电影：省时、有趣、易懂
2、 读原著：细节更多、语言优美
3、 我的看法及理由
注意：1、词数：100-120 文章题目和开头已给出（不计入词数）。
2、参考词汇：original work 或book in the original （原著）
Film or book, which do you prefer?
Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original.
【参考范文】One possible Version
Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original. The reason is that it takes less time to understand the whole story. Besides, the film is usually more interesting, and it is easier to follow.
Some others have just the opposite opinion. They think that they can get more detailed information from the original. Meanwhile, the language in the book is possibly more lively and beautiful.
Personally, I agree with the second view. Actually I have more reasons for it. I think I can stay at home, reading quietly in a situation of my own, and what's more, I am able to better understand the author's ideas. In a word, to read the original work is better than to see the film based on it.
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passage ***
There are advantage for students to work while 1_____
Studying at school.One of them was that
2_____
they can earn money.For the most part,
3______
students working to earn money for their own
4____
use.Earning their own money allow them
5 _____
to spend on anything as if they please.
6_____
they would
have to ask their parents for
7____
money or for permission to do things by
8 ____
the money.Some students may also to save 9____
up for our college or future use.
10______
【参考答案】
KEY 4
There are advantage for students to work while ___ advantages
Studying at school.One of them was that
is
they can earn money.For the most part,
students working to earn money for their own
work
use.Earning their own money allow them
allows
to spend on anything as if they please.╱if
they would ∧
have to ask their parents for
not
money or for permission to do things by
with
the money.Some students may also to save
/to
up for our college or future use. their
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一, 高考英语书面表达基本策略:
如果是看图写文，看懂每幅图之间的联系至关重要。
10句话，120个词左右。
查错漏。完稿后，检查一下有没有时态，语态，拼写错误并逐一加以改正。 卷面整洁。卷面整洁干净甚至比准确，通顺，简介更重要。因为整洁干净给阅卷人精神上带来愉悦，相对而言，分数自然要给得高一些。
为了帮助同学们在平时写作练习的时候时刻牢记这些写作的基本要领，特编顺口溜如下：细审题，巧构思，列要点，防遗漏。写日记，同汉语；书信，通知格式要牢记。看清图表细梳理，写人记事按顺序；完稿后查遗漏，整洁干净莫忘记。
二, 高考英语书面表达高分策略：从遣词，造句，谋篇三个方面分析。
, 如果仅仅记住几个简单基础的词汇,而且一味的重复低水平的英语知识点,还远远没有达到大学的入学要求。这就要求考生在平时的训练和考试当中，有意识的强化“复杂，高级”这两个概念，使自己的作文能力区别于普通学生的作文，使自己一下子就站在一个比别人高的位置上，充分显示自己的实力。
表达人物爱憎感情： like, love, be interested in, be fond of… hate, dislike, be tired of, lose interest in… happy, excited, pleased, satisfied, angry, sad, worried, disappointed, terrified, mad, frightened…
介绍人物的影响及人们对人的评价： He became famous for his new theory. The people had come to love him as an inspiring leader. We regard Li Fei as our model. Lei Feng has been praised for his communist spirit. People spoke highly of him and all respected him.
常见描述人物性格，外貌和身体状况等的词语 good-looking /funny-looking /strong-looking /ugly-looking /dirty-looking /ordinary-looking /blue-eyed /white-eyed /warm-hearted /light-hearted /kind-hearted /absent-minded /tall /short /beautiful /pretty /lovely /naughty/ be blind /lame in /be in good or poor condition/ healthy/ fine/ well /strong-tempered /bad-tempered /near-sighted /far-sighted /foolish /stupid /silly /clever /smart /wise /bright / diligent /intelligent /lazy /hard working, etc.
造句的原则：句式多变，语法活用，句子是表达一个完整意思的最小当位，所以造句能力在英文写作中是非常重要的。好的英语句子能够生动，形象，准确的表达内容。所以要想写出漂亮的书面表达，必须从写好句子开始。
英语基本句型及造句:
主语+谓语+状语(介词,名词短语或从句) The sun rises up in the east and sets in the west. We get up early every morning. The meeting lasted 2 hours.
+不及物动词+副词 This kind of wine drinks well and sells well. The suit wears well. Glass breaks easily.
+谓语+介词+宾语 We all agreed on the terms. He hates to argue with his wife about such small matters. All these things are to be answered for.
+系动词+形容词 Good medicine tastes bitter to the mouth. He was so tired that he fell asleep the moment he went to bed. Your explanation sounds reasonable.
+谓语+直接宾语 I want your promise. Have your fixed my watch? This factory produces 1000 cars a week.
+谓语+间接宾语+直接宾语 He paid me a visit yesterday. He owed me 50 yuan. He wrote his family a letter yesterday.
+谓语+宾语+宾补 (to do) I will get someone to repair the recorder for you. I didn’t mean to hurt you. He invited me to teach at a well-known university.
+谓语+宾语+宾补 (do) I often hear her sing the song. The boss made workers work 15 hours a day. Don’t forget to have him come.
+谓语+现在分词 I heard her singing in the next room. We could feel our heats beating fast. Did you observe the birds flying around the trees?
+谓语+过去分词 I must have my watch repaired. We must get he task finished on time. Speak louder to make yourself understood by everybody.
+谓语+宾语(动名词) I suggested putting off the meeting. They all avoided mentioning the matter. We can’t help laughing at the news.
+谓语+宾语(不定式) I can’t afford to buy such a large house. Don’t pretend to know what you don’t. He feared to speak in her presence. +谓语+宾语(名词/代词)+介词+宾语 Nothing can prevent us from going forward. Thank you for your help. He demanded an answer from me.
It was early in the morning. Mr. Smith was in his garden. He was watering flowers. Early in the morning, Mr. Smith was watering flowers in his garden.
A girl was crossing a road. The girl was pretty. The road was wide. A pretty girl was crossing a wide road.
写好句子的方法二：改写句子 1) Mr. Green is a tall man, who wears a pair of thick glasses. (改成介词短语做伴随状语) 1) The book cost me 300 yuan. Mr. Green is a tall man with a pair of thick glasses. 2) The ice on the lake is too thin for us to skate on. (使用so…that…结构改写句子) The ice on the lake is so thin that we can’t skate on it.
这本书花了我300元。 I spent 300 yuan on the book. I paid 300 yuan for the book. The price of the book is 300 yuan. It cost me 300 yuan to buy the book. I don’t know any English, nor does Li Ming. I hardly know any English, nor does Li Ming. I hardly know any English, neither does Li Ming. I hardly know any English, no more does Li Ming. I hardly know any English, so it is with Li Ming. I know no more English than Li Ming does. I know as little English as Li Ming does.
一到家，我就把所见到的一切都记了下来。 On/Upon arriving home, I wrote down everything I had seen. As soon as I arrived home, I wrote down everything I had seen. The moment I arrived home, I wrote down everything I had seen. The instant I arrived home, I wrote down everything I had seen. No sooner had I arrived home than I wrote down everything I had seen.
昨天下午他才来。 He came here yesterday afternoon. He didn’t come here until yesterday afternoon. Not until yesterday afternoon did he come here. It was yesterday afternoon that he arrived here. It was not until yesterday afternoon that he came here.
高考英语：写作综合训练集
请你根据右面表格中的内容写一篇英语短文，介绍2010年上海世博会的情况。
注意：
1．短文需包括表格中的全部内容，可适当增加细节，使行文连贯；
2．词数：100左右。
参考词汇：
世博会the World Expo；遗产heritage；促进promote
时间2010年5月1日至10月31日
地点 上海
主题 Better City，Better Life
规模 占地面积5．28平方公里，200多个国家及组织参展
目的 1．保护城市遗产，关注城市发展
2．寻求发展中国家城市的发展模式
3．促进人类社会的交流和理解
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【参考范文】---One possible version:
From May 1st to October 31st, 2010, Shanghai will be the focus of the whole world, for the World Expo is to be held there and then．Its theme is “Better City, Better Life”．
The large garden, which covers 5．28 square kilometers, will attract more than 200 countries and organizations to take part．There will be three main things to be done at the Expo．The first one is how to protect city heritage and concern about the development of cities．The second is to seek for the best way for city development in the developing countries．The last aims at promoting the communication and understanding of human society．
Shanghai is well prepared to welcome friends from all over the world．
本文是一篇介绍上海世博会的说明文。文章应使用第三人称it或Shanghai；文章的时态应用一般现在时。根据表格内容按一定的逻辑顺序展开介绍，把总体概括性内容划为第一段，重点、核心内容放在第二段，最后总结全文。