郑州市 2014高考英语短文改错、书面表达一轮训练（3）附参考范文
(201*·石家庄质检)
I am a very active girl in my class. I have many hobby，1.__ ______
such as writing stories, playing piano and singing English2.________
songs. My most favorite subject is English.
I became3.________
interested in it when I was very young. My dream is 4.________
to study abroad. But now I need to improve my English5.________
and learn more about west culture as well. I will be6.________
able to improving the friendship between China and7.________
the rest of the world. I hoped my dream will come true.8.________
And I believe in nobody can change my mind. I will work9.____ ____
harder and follow my heart, no matter how happens！10.________
答案与解析：
1．hobby→hobbies many后接复数名词，下文such as后列举的内容也是提示。
2．piano前加the play the piano表示“弹钢琴”，是固定搭配。西洋乐器类名词前常用定冠词the。
3．去掉most favorite本身就是“最喜爱的”，因此原句语义重复。
4．√
5．But→So 前后逻辑上是因果而不是转折关系。
6．west→western 依据语境这里表示“西方文化”，应用形容词western作定语。
7．improving→improve be able to do sth.表示“能够做某事”。
8．hoped→hope 这里表示说话人现在的愿望，故应用一般现在时。
9．去掉in I believe that..我相信……。believe in表示“信任，信仰”，其后不能接从句。
10．how→what no matter what happens无论发生什么，what充当从句的主语。
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请根据下表内容写一篇介绍刘国正的英语短文。
注意：1．词数：120左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
姓名 出生地 出生时间 身高 体重 职业
刘国正 湖北武汉 1980年 1．66m 63kg 乒乓球运动员
经历、成
就、特点 1．六岁开始打球；
2．1995年进入国家队；
3．训练刻苦；
4．曾多次荣获国家及国际大赛冠军；5．特点：敢打敢拼；心理素质好，大赛发挥出色。
现况 2012年1月3日正式成为国乒男二队主教练 ________________________________________________________________________
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参考范文：
Liu Guozheng，a super table tennis star，was born in Wuhan，Hubei Province in 1980.He is 1．66 meters tall and weighs 63 kilograms.
When he was six，he began to play table tennis.In 1995，he was chosen to the National Team.He trained hard and was strict with himself.Since then，he has won several championships in the national and international matches.Daring to struggle in the match and having fine quality are his strengths，so he performs well in the matches.Since January 3rd,2012，he has acted officially as coach of No.2 National Table Tennis Male Team.
We're sure that our national table tennis will make greater achievements under his guidance.
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第***套
短文改错（共10小题；每小题1分，满分10分）
此题要求改正所给短文中的错误。对标有题号的每一行做出判断：如有错误（每行只有一个错误），则按下列情况改正：
此行多一个词：把多余的词用斜线（＼）划掉，在该行右边横线上写出该词，并也用斜线划掉。
此行缺一个词：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（八），在该行右边横线上写出该加的词。
此行错一个词：在错的词下划一横线，在该行右边横线上写出改正后的词。
注意：每行都有一个错误。
I was a honest child indeed．I didn’t dare to tell lies 76．
because of my eyes often let the secret out ．I remembered 77．
telling a lie to my parents, and I could hard fix my eyes on 78．
my father’s face, let alone my mother eyes．I glanced 79．
here and there, up or down, nervously． 80．
However, after I came to Beijing, I no longer have to
81．
worry my eyes because everything I wanted to say 82．
was sent by letter．I found myself often tell small lies．I
83．
wrote, “I’m
in Beijing．I enjoy the food selling at the
84．
university．And at the weekends, I often buy fried chickens 85．
or pork to eat．”
短改: 76．a改为an
77．删去of
78．hard 改为hardly
79．mother 改为mother’s
80．or改为and 81．have改为had
82．my前加about 83．tell改为telling
84．selling改为sold
85．chickens改为chicken
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仔细观察下面图画，请你给China Daily写一篇100字左右的短文，描述一下你在路上所见的事，并就骑车人--李平的行为，简单阐明自己的感想。
参考范文
One Possible Version
One day Li Ping was riding fast when she suddenly saw an old woman before her. But it was too late to stop immediately. The old woman was knocked down. Li Pin didn't help her. Instead, she scolded her and rode away.
When Li Ping stopped her bicycle, she was surprised to find her new shoes missing. She hurried back and found the old woman there holding her shoes in her hands. She was sorry for what she had done and apologized to the woman.
From this, I learned everybody should be kind to each other. Never do as Li Pin did to the old, or you will feel greatly sorry.
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4.假设你是李华，你的美国朋友Tom上个月来到北京学习。七月份你将去北京参加暑期中学生英语演讲比赛，你在资料搜集、语言运用等方面遇到了困难。请根据以下要点给Tom写一封电子邮件：
1.询问Tom的生活和学习情况；
2.谈谈你的困难并请Tom帮忙；
3.告诉Tom你打算赛后去看他。
注意：1.词数：120-150
2.可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。
【参考范文】
4.Dear Tom,
How time flies! It has been a month since you came to Beijing. How is everything going on with your life and study now?
What excited me most is that I will go to Beijing to attend an English speech contest to be held in summer holiday in July for middle school students. But unfortunately, I’m encountering many difficulties in collecting materials needed and I also have problems in the application of the language. I wonder if you can help me with these difficulties. I really appreciate it if you could help me.
Here is good news for you. I’ve decided to go to see you after the English speech contest. I am looking forward to seeing you.
Best wishes to you and your parents!
Yours,
Li Hua
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8.下面图表是对我省某校高三学生选择高考志愿时所考虑因素的调查结果。请用英语写一篇简要的报告，并说说你自己的观点。
注意：（1）文章的开头已经写好。
（2）词数10左右。
（3）可以适当发挥。London and it 2______
has a very big schoolyard.You can live in the school 3____
or near the school.They have all sorts of course.4___ ___
I`m sure you will find one you like it.I know you 5___
are particular interested in human rights.So I will 6____
see that there is anything on their website 7____
I will send my friend Charlie meet you at the airport 8____
when you arrived.You met him a few years ago, but he 9___
has changed a lot since then.Both your aunt or I look 10___
forward to seeing you again.
【参考答案】KEY 6
Dear Anish,
Here are the information about Manchester University.___is___
It is about 200 miles far away from London and it ___far___
has a very big schoolyard.You can live in the school__right__
or near the school.They have all sorts of course.___courses___
I`m sure you will find one you like it.I know you __it__
are particular interested in human rights.So I will ___particularly__
see that there is anything on their website ___if/whether__
I will send my friend Charlie meet you at the airport _to___
when you arrived.You met him a few years ago, but he __arrive_
has changed a lot since then.Both your aunt or I look __and_
forward to seeing you again.
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谋篇的原则：
满分作文都有个共性就是有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。文章的连贯性和紧凑感是很重要的。句子作为最小的表达意思的语言当位如果只是被随意的整合，是无法达到有效表达的目的。
常见的句子之间的连接手段有： 使用代词指代上一句中的名词 重复使用上一句中的词 使用连接词 使用平行结构 高考大纲中常用的连接词:
表并列补充关系的: what is more, besides, also, as well, moreover, furthermore, in addition, 表转折对比关系的: but, however, yet, instead, on the other hand, on the contrary, although, different from, in contrast to, despite, in spite of, whereas, unlike, nevertheless, not only…but also, here…there, years ago…today, this…that, the former…the latter, then…now, the first…whereas the second, once…now, on the one hand…on the other hand, some…others, 表因果关系的: since, as, because (of), for, so, thus, therefore, as a result, so that, 表条件关系的: if, on the condition (that), as long as, unless, or else, 表时间关系的: when, after, before, until, as soon as, later, afterwards, soon, lately, recently, since, from then on, eventually, in the meantime, then, suddenly, at the same time, next, early this morning/year/century, after an interval, now, after, presently, later, afterward, somewhat later, finally, at last, all of a sudden, 表特定的顺序关系: above all, first of all, firstly, first, secondly, the , next, finally, in the end, at last, 表换一种方式表达: in other words, that is to say, to put it another way, 表进行举例说明: for instance, for example, like, such as, 表陈述事实: in fact, actually, as a matter of fact, to tell you the truth 表总结: on the whole, in short, all in all, general, in a word, in conclusion, in closing, in summary.
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【参考范文】
8.
Some senior middle school graduates have different opinions on how to choose their majors and universities.
About 35% of the students insist that the choice should be based on their own interest. They say interest is the way leading to success. They think it is a miserable thing to be forced to study what they have no interest in.
The percentage of the students who consider it is the need of the society that matters a lot, is 45%.They say think it will help them find the job they like best. In addition, interest can be developed and changed.
Interestingly, there are about 20% of the students who find it so difficult to make a choice that they prefer to follow the advice offered by their parents or teachers.
In my opinion, interest is the most important of all. Without interest you can’t study the subject very well and may have more difficulty with your career.
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