郑州市 2014高考英语短文改错、书面表达一轮训练（12）附参考范文
(201*·唐山联考)
When I was a child, my mom was pushed me to study hard，1.________
hoping I could get a chance to go to college. I experience2.________
pressure for the first time. I did that my mom expected3.________
because I didn't want to let her off. I was born to a poor4.________
peasant family, but I really knew life was not easy. All the5.________
things my mother did was the result of her hope that I could6.________
lead better life in the future. As the saying goes, “No pains7.________
no gains.”I was finally able to meet my mother expectations and8.________
have a chance to go to college. Thanks to my mother's push and the
9.________
pressure, I made it. Now, I no longer think pressure is a good thing.10.________
答案与解析：
1．去掉第二个was 此处不用被动语态，故was多余。
2．experience→experienced 此处应用一般过去时态，与全文时态保持一致。
3．that→what 这里用what引导宾语从句并在从句中作宾语，that没有这种用法。
4．off→down 结合上下文可知此处意为“我不想让她失望”，故应用let sb. down表示“让某人失望”。
5．but→and或so 此处应为顺承关系而非转折关系，故将but改为and或so。
6．was→were 此处主语为all the things，故应用were。
7．better前加a lead a better life表示“过一种更好的生活”。
8．mother→mother's 此处表示“达到了妈妈的期望”，故应用其所有格形式。
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10．good→bad 根据上文可知此处是指“我不再认为压力是一件坏事”，故应将good改为bad。
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请你根据以下提示，结合你生活中的一个事例，用英语写一篇短文，谈谈诚信(honesty)的作用。
Honesty means always telling the truth and never cheating.Honesty is a kind of courage and responsibility，an invisible power and wealth.Honesty wins trust，respect and friendship.So it pays to be honest.
注意：①无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；
②内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例；
③文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；
④词数为120左右。
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参考范文
One possible version：
Honesty is a good virtue.If you are honest all the time，you'll be trusted and respected by others.I have learned a lot from my experience of dishonesty.
When I was in Senior One，I was so eager to get a high score that I cheated in the exam.Although nobody discovered it，I had no sense of success at all.Instead，I felt guilty and it bothered me for a long time.What was worse，I was afraid that my friends would know about it and trust me no longer.So from then on，I have been determined never to be dishonest.Otherwise I will be looked down upon and lose all my friends.
As you can see from my experience，if you are honest，you can say and do what you like without fear.In conclusion，to be honest will ensure you a happy life.
增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（^）。并在其下面写出修改后的词。
删除：把多余的词用斜线（/）划掉。
修改：在错的词后划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词。
注意：1．每处错误及修改均仅限一词;
2．只允许修改10处,多者(从第11处起)不记分。
I’m a middle school student name Li Ming. I’m writing to tell you something. Recently I
noticed many of my classmates often go to the cyber cafe near our school. I went there too in
the other day. I was surprising to see many students playing computer games, watching films or
chat. Some students were even talking about love affairs online.
On my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place which we can find much useful informations.
The Internet should be a window to the outside world rather than place for games. The Internet
is good if we make good use of it. Otherwise, it will give us great harm. So the local
government should take measure to make sure that students use cyber cafes positively.
参考答案
I’m a middle school student name Li Ming. I’m writing to tell you something.
1．named
Recently I noticed many of my classmates often go to the cyber cafe near our
school. I went there too in the other day. I was surprising to see many students
2,去掉in
3.surprised
playing computer games, watching films or chat. Some students were even
4．chatting
talking about love affairs online.
5.in
On my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place which we can find much useful
5.in
6.where
informations. The Internet should be a window to the outside world rather than
7 information
place for games. The Internet is good if we make good use of it. Otherwise, it
8 a place
will give us great harm. So the local government should take measure to make
9．do
10 measures
sure that students use cyber cafes positively.
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高考英语书面表达讲义：议论文写作
9．我国正提倡建设“节约型社会”，下图为某校两个学期用水、用电、用纸的情况。请对其进行简要分析，以“How to build an economized society”为题，写一篇作文，谈谈自己的想法。
项目学期 用电 用水 用纸
上学期 80万元 62万元 11万元
下学期 95万元 73万元 12．7万元
文章须包括以下要点：
节电：及时关闭电灯、电脑等用电设备
节水：随手关闭水龙头；废水再利用
节纸：纸张再利用
补充：自己日常生活所感所为
留意：
1．词数：100～120词，短文标题、开头已给出，但不计入总词数。
2．内容可适当发挥，留意行文贯通。
How to build an economized society （东北三校）
Our government is aiming to build an economized society．It is everybody's duty to work hard to achieve this goal including us students．
To build an economized society, we must keep the following points in our minds. Firstly, make sure that the lights and the electric fans are turned off when there is no one in the room. Set the room temperature at above 26℃. Remember to turn off the computer when you are not using it. Secondly, try to form the habit of turning off the tap after it is used. Use basins when washing faces or vegetables. Thus the water can be used again to clean toilets or water flowers. Thirdly, it will be good enough to use a basket instead of plastic bags when you go to the market. As we know, a basket can be used many more times.
In a word, we should try our best to build an economized society.
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假如你是某英文报刊的通讯员，请根据下列表格以A Big Forest Fire为题，写一篇报道。(字数100左右)
起火地点 叛国西南部森林
起火时间 一九九二年十一月末
火因 一青工姻
持续时间 三个多星期
参加救火人员 数千名消防队员及当地居民
伤亡人数 九人死亡，约八十人伤受
经济损失 至少两千万美元
影响 震惊全国
参考范文
A Big Forest Fire
A big forest fire broke out in the forest in the southwest of America at the end of November of 1992. The fire was caused by a young worker's smoking cigarettes. Thousands of firemen and local people tried to put out the fire, but they couldn't put it out in a short time. The fire lasted more than three weeks
and was finally put out.
In the fire nine people died and about eighty people were njured. It caused a loss of at least twenty million US dollars.
The fire shocked the whole country.
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作文（***）
假如你是高中三年级的学生李华，你在学校组织了一项“有烦恼向谁说”的调查
活动。请用英语给校报编辑写一封信，反映相关情况。内容包括：调查结果(如图所示)、持相应想法的理由及你对调查结果的看法。
注意：1．词数100左右。
2．信的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。
Dear Editor，
I a a Senior Three student．Recently we have carried out “To whom do you go when in trouble?” The main findings are as follows．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
One possible version：
Dear Editor,
I am a Senior Three student．Recently we have carried out a survey—“To whom do you go when in trouble?"The main findings are as follows．
61％of the students surveyed select friends or schoolmates as their ideal listeners when they have trouble，the reason of which is that they are in the same age group and have a better understanding of each other．Another 22％choose teachers and parents to talk to．They believe that teachers and parents are rich in life and educational experiences,Nevertheless，there are als 17％who don’t share their troubles at all．They say that their troubles are none of others’business．Others find it hard to get along with others．
It is not easy to reach definite conclusions based on such a small survey．However，some general comments can be made．It seems clear from the respome that some students lack communication with others，and teachers and parents need to play a more important role in teir lives．
Yours sincerely,
高考英语书面表达技巧
如何提高书面表达的档次,争取得高分甚至满分？
不少同学们可能很不理解:考试时,写出的书面表达要点齐全,表达也正确,可就是不知道为什么打不上高分。是啊,为什么呢？今天,我们就来研究如何解决这个问题。
首先让我们来看近年来全国高考英语书面表达的评分标准:第五档（很好）:“覆盖所有主要内容;应用了较多的语法结构和词汇;语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误,但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致;应用简单的语句间的连接成分,使全文结构紧凑;达到了预期的写作目的。”
可见,高考书面表达评分标准在语言的运用上对考生提出了更高的要求。也就是说在考查考生语言准确性的基础上,进一步强调了用词的得体性、表达方式的多样性。如果同学们仅运用基础的词汇和基本的句型,不能体现出较强的语言运用能力,即使要点齐全,表达没有语法错误,也不能给人一种含金量高的审美享受,因此很难在考试的评分中得到较高档次。评分标准给我们传递了另外一个信息,如果有意识地使用较高级词汇或复杂结构,即使有些错误,也不扣分,仍属于最高档次。
因此要使一个平淡的文章变得丰富起来,从而提高书面表达的档次。我认为同学们应着力于从以下三个方面来增强书面表达的效果。
1.学会使用较高级的词汇
词汇反映你知识贮存量的多少,也是衡量英语水平的一个重要标志。从评分标准可知,运用高级的词汇对提高书面表达的分数至关重要。大家先来看下面这些句子:
(1)Because the weather was good,our journey was comfortable.
Thanks to the good weather,our journey was comfortable.
(2)We all think he is a great man.
We all think highly of him.
(3)Suddenly I thought out a good idea. ...came upon...
A good idea occurred to me./A good idea suddenly struck me.
(4)The students there needn’t pay for their books.
Books are free for the students there.
(5)As a result the plan was a failure.
The plan turned out (to be) a failure.
(6)When she heard he had died,she went pale with sorrow.
At the news of his death,she went pale with sorrow.
(7)She went to Austria in order to study music.
She went to Austria for/with the purpose of studying music.
(8)When he spoke,he felt more and more excited.
The more he spoke,the more excited he felt.
(9)In our school,there are twenty-six classrooms.
Our school is made up of twenty-six classrooms./Twenty-six classrooms make up our school.
(10)You can find my house easily.
You’ll have no trouble/difficulty finding my house.
2.学会使用较丰富的句式
在整篇文章中,避免只使用一两个句型,要灵活运用各种语法结构,运用得当的句子结构可以给文章增色不少,从而使整篇文章因此而生辉。例如:
(1)When he arrives,please give me an e-mail.（使用v.-ing形式）
→On his arriving/arrival,please give me an e-mail.
(2)To his surprise,the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）
→What surprises him is that the little girl knows so many things.
(That the little girl knows so many things surprises him./It surprises him that the little girl knows so many things.)
(3)Though I’m weak,I’ll make the effort.(使用倒装句)
→Weak as I am,I’ll make the effort.
(4)He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型①It was... ②not until...)
→①It was not until he had read the news in the newspaper that he knew what had happened.
→②Not until he had read the news in the newspaper did he know what had happened.
(5)I passed the physics exam because of your help.（使用虚拟语气）
→①I could not have passed the physics exam but for your help.
→②If you had not helped me,I could not have passed the physics exam.
(6)She walked out of the lab and many students followed her.(用过去分词)
→Followed by many students,she walked out of the lab.
(7)They sang and laughed as they went back to school.(使用v.-ing形式)
→Singing and laughing,they went back to school.
(8)I won’t believe what he says.（使用状语从句）
→No matter what he says,I won’t believe.
(9)If you study hard,you will make rapid progress.（使用并列句）
→Study hard and you’ll make rapid progress.
(10)He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.(使用倒装句)
→No sooner had he come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad.
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