技法3| 丰富充实的细节信息
开头好只是表象内容好才是真的好。具体的表达往往比泛泛而谈更能引起读者的共鸣。换句话说写作需要“真善美”尽量避免“假大空”。那么如何做到内容充实呢?答案就是注重细节。例如句子本身没什么毛病但是如果我们再具体一些我的哪位朋友?修理的是怎样的汽车?这样是不是会表达得更好。我们不妨把句子改成My friend his 12-year-old Santana.这样既增加了词数又充实了细节。请看下面的习作对比孰优孰劣不言而喻。写作要求:学校要举行一场题为“Turning a bad mood into a good one”的英语作文比赛要求你写一篇文章其中一个要点是如何调整心情。习作一:Keeping a good mood is of great importance.When you feel angry or anxious temper and we should always make ourselves happy.
习作二:We should learn to keep a good mood.Communicating with family members or friends is the best choice.Also listening to some peaceful music can be helpful.Reading is another way to stop being mad.
(2016·全国乙卷)假定你是李华暑假想去一家外资公司兼职已写好申请书和个人简历(resume)。给外教Ms Jenkins写信请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。
注意:1.词数100左右;
可以适当增加细节以使行文连贯。考生作文 点评与优化My English is very poorn meet a lot of difficulties in finding a job.So I must try my best to learn English well.If I can't learn English well,I can't find a good job. [细节信息点评]
(1)上面的作文虽然词数不算少但有用的句子却没有几个属于“假大空”。
(2)内容应围绕着让对方改正一些错
[尝试优化]
作文提升[参考范文][满分作文]perience,I plan to find a part-time job in a foreign capital company.I have already finished my job application form and personal resume.However you a letter,hoping to get your guide and suggestions.You can correct any mistakes you find in them. This summer I intend to take up a part-time job in a foreign companyng experience and meet new friends.My application and resume have been prepared and I sincerely hope you can help me polish them.Firstly,I'm wondering if you can help add some contents.Besides,if there are some mistakes in them,I hope you can help correct them.
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业3:Unit 3《Celebration》(北师大版必修1通用版)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业4:Unit 4《Cyberspace》(北师大版必修2通用版)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业15:Unit 3《Science and nature》(牛津译林版必修5湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业14:Unit 2《The environment》(牛津译林版必修5湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业25:Unit 2《The universal language》(牛津译林版选修8湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业18:Unit 3《Understanding each other》(牛津译林版选修6湖南专用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答44:Module 2《The Renaissance》(外研版选修8通用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业6:Unit 6《Design》(北师大版必修2通用版)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业1:Unit 1《Lifestyles》(北师大版必修1通用版)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业8:Unit 8《Adventure》(北师大版必修3通用版)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业19:Unit 4《Helping people around the world》(牛津译林版选修6湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业21:Unit 2《Fit for life》(牛津译林版选修7湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业22:Unit 3《The world online》(牛津译林版选修7湖南专用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答35:Module 5《Cloning》(外研版选修6通用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答5:Unit 5《Nelson Mandela—a modern hero》(新人教版必修1通用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答4:Unit 4《Earthquakes》(新人教版必修1通用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答32:Module 2《Fantasy Literature》(外研版选修6通用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业27:Unit 4《Films and film events》(牛津译林版选修8湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业11:Unit 2《Sports events》(牛津译林版必修4湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业23:Unit 4《Public transport》(牛津译林版选修7湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业17:Unit 2《What is happiness to you》(牛津译林版选修6湖南专用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答28:Module 4《Carnival》(外研版选修5通用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答26:Module 2《A Job Worth Doing》(外研版选修5通用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业26:Unit 1《Art》(新人教版选修6陕西专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业24:Unit 4《Making the news》(新人教版必修5陕西专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业13:Unit 1《Getting along with others》(牛津译林版必修5湖南专用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业26:Unit 3《The world of colours and light》(牛津译林版选修8湖南专用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答34:Module 4《Music》(外研版选修6通用)
2017年高考英语一轮复习课时作业详答36:Module 6《War and Peace》(外研版选修6通用)
2017届高考英语一轮复习课时作业25:Unit 5《First aid》(新人教版必修5陕西专用)