技法6| 规避重复适当进行句式升级
1. 规避重复尽量避免过多地使用某一个单词必要时选择使用其他恰当的同义词或词组来代替。like reading while my brother likes watching football matches.
→I like reading while my brother enjoys watching football matches.
We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also built a library where the old playground used to be.
→We've built a new experiment building beside the old one and we've also set up a library where the old playground used to be.
2. 句式升级(1)使用被动语态must be done to stop pollution.(被动语态)(2)使用强调句nglish when I entered senior high school.
→It was when I entered senior high school that I realized the importance of English.(强调句型)It was not until all the fish in the river died out that the villagers realized how serious the pollution was.(强调句型)(3)使用倒装句Not until we lose health do we know its value.(倒装句)Only in this way can the children grow up mentally and physically healthy.(倒装句)(4)使用省略句heart.
→Although faced with many problems, they didn't lose heart.(省略句)If not well organized, the meeting will be a failure.(省略句)(5)使用虚拟语气 children and parents to take action to make small changes.
→It is high time that both children and parents took/should take action to make small changes.(虚拟语气)tition.
→Without your help, I couldn't have won first place in the English Speaking Competition.(虚拟语气)(6)使用感叹句What a good time we had with the peasants that day!(感叹句)
(2015·浙江高考)在班级活动中当你的想法与大多数同学不一致时你是坚持自己的观点并说服别人还是尊重大多数同学的意见?请你以“When I Have a Different Opinion”为题用英语写一篇100~120个词的短文。要求如下:
从以上两种做法中选择一种;
以具体事例阐述你选择的理由。
注意:短文中不得以任何形式透露地区、学校、同学姓名等真实信息。否则按考试作弊行为认定。续表考生作文 点评与优化 作文提升When I Have a Different Opinion
In class activities, opinions are always different.When my opinion is different from others,I always hold my different opinion.
I think my different opinion is better.I say to them why my opinion is better.They will accept my opinion because they finally believe my opinion is better.
One day we wanted to go for an outing.We were discussing where to go for the outing.Most of my classmates wanted to go to the park.I didn't think going to the park is good.
I have a better place to go for the outing.Finally all my classmates agreed with me.We had a good time that day. [名师点评]本文总体来说符合要求但层次不高下面从两方面谈一谈所存在的问题。(1)本文出现了一定数量的重复。例如different连用了四次应该用不同的方式来表达例如可以用various来代替。(2)本文基本没有高级的表达。高级句式的应用是非常重要的哪怕是一两处也能起到画龙点睛的作用使文章有很大的提 [尝试优化] When I Have a Different Opinion
We may have different opinions in organizing class activities.We may have various ways to deal with such a situation.
When I have a better idea,I would choose to stick to it.By doing so,I can not only share good ideas with others but also learn to express myself clearly.
Once we were discussing where to go for an outing.Most of my classmates wanted to go to a park while I had an idea of going to a nicer place.I managed to persuade my classmates into accepting my idea.What a good time we had that day!
Good opinions are worth sticking to because they can benefit us all.
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