这个暑假的SAT词汇和写作加强班第二轮已经快结束了,今天开始讲评布置的作文作业。感觉同学们在写作上不仅离SAT考试的要求有距离,而且基本不能达到在美国课堂上做小论文和ESSAY的要求,我有些许生气。
诚然,写作是语言学习的最后环节,也是最终极的一个高度,对于任何语言都是这样。学习中文这么多年,每次提起笔来,我心里面底气非常不足。英文也是一样,就如罗永浩同志有一次调侃,背过字典的就只有老俞和那个广东疯子(未考证,我太太说给我听的),的确,我是背过韦氏字典,但是要我写英文,每一次我都是逐字逐句斟酌,如履薄冰,身后总感觉有人在偷偷笑我。在国内这儿环境里,做留学咨询的人很多,出版名校指南指西指北指ANYWHERE的人很多,但是敢于亮出来写和出版留学文书写作的,数来数去,我看也就还是包凡一老师和另外两个的老人了。
这还真的不是开玩笑的。
今天贴出来一位同学的命题作文,题目是我出的,Talk about a controversial event, issue or occurence in your life, or something that you believe is controversial. Tell me how you feel about it and why. (写一件有争议的事,谈谈你的看法,300-400字,限时两小时)。这个同学的英文很好,但是熬夜才写出来,凌晨2点发给我。文章从总体上说不错,对于一个中国高中生来说,过关,但是对于哥大的本科一年级HALF-SEMESTER论文,我给70分。
行文著述,立意挂帅。首先,上来就要开宗明义地说明自己的观点。ISSUE是什么?为什么会有这个ISSUE?总有一些事情和事实来引发兴趣和关注吧?FACTS放在什么地方,不要冗长描述,言简意赅地说明。然后,你的REASONINGS是什么,要一一列出,正方反方,你站在那一边?分析和论述,这才是文章的血肉,要恰如其分地嵌入和安排,令每一个GROUND或RATIONALE理由充分。最后,有结论吗? 回应开头和全文,看看有什么总结,陈词,让步,递进还是强调。到这里,短短的一篇文章就可以结束了。
先看看,然后我来点评几句。
Topic: Is handwriting of Chinese important to modern people?
Nowadays, teenagers usually spend 3 or (to)4 hours per day on the Internet. And they are used to typing characters on computers so far as they forget how to write a great number of characters on paper. Educators and parents have raised a lot concerns about the importance of Chinese handwriting. On the other hand, some people say, Let it be and we do not need handwriting anymore. Then I will discuss this controversial topic.(这里应该引出自己的观点了。 I am of the belief that different people may have different needs or preference to use handwritten characters in their work and life, depending on various circumstances....或者别的一些观点,无论站在那一边,要明确一些)
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