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GMAT Argument经典范文赏析(3)

发布时间:2016-03-02  编辑:查字典英语网小编

  GMAT作文范文,是被历年考生竞相追逐的对象,GMAT作文范文的香饽饽效应实属必然,既然是GMAT作文范文,其示范性是不言而喻的。GMAT作文范文虽然不能穷举,但是本文还是重磅推出GMAT作文范文系列经典案例,希望考生阅后,能有自己认真的总结。

  GMAT作文范文7:Argument

  7. The following appeared in the health section of a magazine on trends and lifestyles. People who use the artificial sweetener aspartame are better off consuming sugar, since aspartame can actually contribute to weight gain rather than weight loss. For example, high levels of aspartame have been shown to trigger a craving for food by depleting the brain of a chemical that registers satiety, or the sense of being full. Furthermore, studies suggest that sugars, if consumed after at least 45 minutes of continuous exercise, actually enhance the bodys ability to burn fat. Consequently, those who drink aspartame-sweetened juices after exercise will also lose this calorie-burning benefit. Thus it appears that people consuming aspartame rather than sugar are unlikely to achieve their dietary goals。 Discuss how well reasoned . . . Etc。

  The article concludes that it is better to use sugar than the artificial sweetener aspartame for those people who want to lost weight. The author uses two reasons to support his viewpoints. First, high levels aspartame will cause people to eat more. Second, sugar can help fat-burning if used properly. These reasons can only tell reader that aspartame has some bad side-effect while sugar has some good effect, but they cant prove that sugar is better than aspartame for weight-control. Therefore, the reasoning is less than sufficient and the argument is not convincing。

  In the first reason, author fails to define what the level of amount is high. The normal dose of aspartame that people consuming may be very low. If most people use artificial sweetener that contains lower level of aspartame than the one that will trigger a craving for food, then the advantage of consuming sugar no long exists. Moreover, the author didnt mention whether sugar will also contain that chemical. If it is the case, people should turn to the third product。

  The second reason is also not sound, because it requires people not to drink until 45 minutes after exercise. This procedure is difficult to follow because most people drink juices immediately after or during excise. If they have to wait for 45 minutes, they may not need drink any longer. Also, the author didnt mention whether the calorie that sugar itself generates is less than the amount it helps to burn. Finally, the article fails to address whether the aspartames side-effect, if any, is bigger than sugars。

  In conclusion, the argument is nor sound or convincing. However, if it had included the above mentioned items, it would be more compelling。

  GMAT作文范文8:Argument

  8. The following appeared in the editorial section of a corporate newsletter. The common notion that workers are generally apathetic about management issues is false, or at least outdated: a recently published survey indicates that 79 percent of the nearly 1,200 workers who responded to survey questionnaires expressed a high level of interest in the topics of corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs。 Discuss how well reasoned . . . Etc。

  In this argument, the arguer claims that workers are becoming more and more enthusiastic about management issues. To substantiate this conclusion, the arguer provides the result of a survey, which point out that more than half of the workers asked were considerably interested in the topics of certain corp9orate programs, While this argument has several merits, there are some logical errors that seriously undermine the reasoning。

  In the first place, the procedure of the sampling is unclear. With different views on management issues, the 1,200 workers should come from different fields. If they worked in the same department, however, the results of the survey would be unreliable. In addition, the arguer must provide a more detailed process of the questionnaire。

  In the second place, no evidence is offered to indicate that most of the other workers take the same level of interest in those programs as the ones asked, for the reason that the 1,200 workers are not representative of all of the workers. Hence, the arguer must present much more data such as the total number of worker。

  Last but not least, the arguer makes a hasty generalization about the types of issues that the workers are interested in. It is entirely possible, for example, that most of the 1,200 workers were concerned about only the corporate restructuring and redesign of benefits programs and still apathetic about other issues. If so n the survey on which the argument relies would lack credulity and therefore would not lend strong support to the argument。

  In conclusion, the arguer fails to demonstrate that the results of the survey are reasonable and convincing. To solidify the argument, the arguer must present more concrete information about the procedure and many other samples of the survey. Furthermore, the arguer would have to provide a clearer definition of management issues so that the workers might have more choices when answering the questions of the survey。

  GMAT作文范文的示范效应主要体现在思路和切入点的选择上,考生完全依靠GMAT作文范文的话,不仅不能取得理想成绩,而且也违背了GMAT考试的初衷,建议考生可以结合GMAT作文范文,进行有针对性地复习,在平时的复习当中,可以培养自己的作文话题思维,掌握切入点的选择技巧。最后,GMAT预祝大家在GMAT考试中取得好成绩!

  

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